Just a bit of daftness about feeling out of place. I was the only straight in the Village!
GAY BAR
The boys took me down to the gay bar,
the one on the High Street in town.
The punters so amorous
glitzy and glamorous
made me feel very dressed-down.
I'm happy enough in the gay bar
I'll stay for a cocktail or three
but I feel conspicuous
faintly ridiculous;
everyone's looking at me!
You can see they're confused in the gay bar
perhaps I'm a dyke? or a femme?
I'm six foot in my heels
and those boobs - are they real?
I could be a man, just like them.
I'd like to get out of this gay bar
the drag queens look better than me
but under the frocks
the fake boobs and false locks
they're not what they wanted to be.
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Oh Yes!
Written by Katanga (1218 comments posted) 23rd May 2008 |
Yet again I am in awe and admiration!
It's so good to see casual 'conversational' poetry that has such perfect meter and rhyme.
Your last line is a killer:
'they're not what they wanted to be.'
Such bathos and pathos combined!
It begs for an exclamation mark, but the ordinary full-stop is brilliant.
So sad, in the best sense of the word.
I once went to 'Heaven', a gay club under Charing Cross arches, on 'open night' ('straights' were allowed in).
I was petrified, but thought "I will survive!"
I was so enlightened - there were some extraordinary people there, but SO friendly - a six-foot-six black man in a full white wedding dress, who approached the trembling me only to say, "Do you come here often? I wish you were one of us - have you got a light?"
Then the mirrored stand-up urinals - but that's another story.
Cheers!
J K T
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Written by Brett (782 comments posted) 23rd May 2008 |
Top form again, V!
A very funny piece, and your rhyming is inspired.
Cheers |
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 23rd May 2008 |
| It's all right looking the part - but if they had to put up with monthly periods, or bringing children into the world and problems with hormones - I ask this question? Would they still want to pretend they are women? I loved your poem Veronica. Very well put and extremely funny. I liked the rhythm of this poem too. You could almost sing it. |
Limerick style yet !
Written by patterjack (1193 comments posted) 23rd May 2008 |
Much more human in approach than that one about the young man from Khartoum
Couple of alexandrines get away from what can be monotonous in the form.
I know a few gays - intelligent and sensitive people -- and they have their hormone problems too , which is why they do not pretend -- they are indeed women trapped in a male type body.
patterjack
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Written by mia_ms_kim (1017 comments posted) 23rd May 2008 |
It's interesting to know the gay people (I assume there were both men and women there?) noticed you were different.
The last line was very sad.
Mia  |
Written by Veronica_Milvus (626 comments posted) 23rd May 2008 |
| Actually I think I was the only woman there - but I couldn't be completely sure! |
there is
Written by patterjack (1193 comments posted) 23rd May 2008 |
always one way to find out !
patterjack |
there is
Written by patterjack (1193 comments posted) 23rd May 2008 |
always one way to find out !
patterjack |
and still there is
Written by patterjack (1193 comments posted) 23rd May 2008 |
a tendency on this computer for me to double post !!
patterjack |
and still there is
Written by patterjack (1193 comments posted) 23rd May 2008 |
a tendency on this computer for me to double post !!
patterjack |
Ho! Ho! Ho! Ho!
Written by Katanga (1218 comments posted) 23rd May 2008 |
. . . and always a tendency to quadruple up!
Yo! Yo! Yo! Yo!
J J J J X X X X |
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 23rd May 2008 |
| The drag queens want to dress like women - but they don't dress like most women, that's the point. If I had ever tried to dress as many of them do, I would not be able to walk - great tall high heels and tight fitting clothes. Most real women like their trousers, comfortable shoes and tee shirts etc. I dare you to go and count the women you meet in the street today and out of ten report back how many were wearing casual trousers and flat shoes to prove the point. The images portrayed by drag queens don't exist in reality. |
Don't Bet on It!
Written by Katanga (1218 comments posted) 23rd May 2008 |
Josie - it depends which street you're in . . .
Some 'real' women in some streets break bones in their feet from wearing pinchy high-heeled shoes on a regular basis.
At least the drag-queens are sensible enough to wear their Doc Martens most of the time!
Cheers!
John |
Written by Veronica_Milvus (626 comments posted) 24th May 2008 |
Josie - their reality is not the same as our reality (and Ilkley is not Old Compton Street) - but I am sure it feels every bit as real to them!
I have some three inch stiletto gold mules with diamante buckles. Can't bloody walk in them though! |
think twice
Written by bwoz (125 comments posted) 24th May 2008 |
From the title I did not think I would like this, but I do. Here is why:
It is so very toungue in cheek funny, but like all great humor is also so very true. I think the proper description is irony -- but with more humor.
Great pace and rhyme. A very well crafted piece that does not lose a step, makes me wish I'd been sitting there in person watching this scene, but it has such nice imagery that I almost feel like I was there.
Well done, top drawer for me.
BW |
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