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£7.97
By Phil
28 May 2008
With a nudge from Veronica. To be honest - I'm more of a beer person as a rule. Whisky is my spirit of choice though.

£7.97

Within my veins there runs an urge
That temperance can never purge:
To take the golden water pure,
My ancestral homeland’s great allure.

But not for me Glenlivet tender
For what I like when on a bender
Is something that, when going down,
Causes me to squint and frown.

It’s Asda’s cheapest amber blend
That scrapes my throat when it descends.
And blood infused with malt (or grain)
Reminds me of my roots again.

Reviews

Written by Veronica_Milvus (768 comments posted) 28th May 2008
Excellent! 
 
It's my ancestral homeland too 
But I can spend much more than you! 
 
Am researching my malt whisky verses as we speak. Excuse me while I go and sniff some open bottles.

Written by Lizzy (838 comments posted) 28th May 2008
Good one Phil. 
Red wine's my tipple but a glass of whisky does wonders and 'refreshes places' that wine doesn't. The problem with expensive whisky is that you have to savour and not guzzle. 
Lizzy
Guzzle!
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 28th May 2008
Nice one ,Phil! 
 
Trouble is, if I guzzle on the amber nectar, Asda's or elsewhere whence, I need a muzzle. 
 
Cheers! 
 
John X (Hic!)

Written by Brett (1001 comments posted) 28th May 2008
Wonderful, Phil. A very touching piece! 
Love that second stanza. 
 
Word of warning though, Phil - if I ever bump into you in a bar, it'll cost you a f**k sight more than £7.97! 
 
Cheers
growing a taste
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 28th May 2008
Good easy piece Phil ! Honest and heartfelt . 
 
In my youth I found that I had to actually work on growing a taste for the usquebaugh -- in my age I allow my children to buy me presents of all 
kinds of single malts , from the lowland milds to the furthest north like the peaty island ones. 
 
I am not a connoisseur however -- though surrounded by folk with real taste. I worked once in a vineyard too-- and once I sipped 97% pure alcohol from the brandy bond store there. 
 
Drink -- great to celebrate-- viva Omar ! Press on ! 
 
patterjack.

Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 28th May 2008
Cheers all.

Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 28th May 2008
I thought this was very touching, linking drink to one's ancestral roots and homeland. Actually I think this piece will work really well as a beer commercial with the picture of a thirsty man gulping down the golden liquid from a can after a hard day's work, with the gold sun setting behind him in the amber sky! 
 
Mia :p

Written by Livinginanattic (473 comments posted) 29th May 2008
Good poem, loved the title! I do like the single malts but usually go for something a bit cheaper. 
 
Ben
HI Phil
Written by jean.day (2387 comments posted) 29th May 2008
I enjoyed the poem, and agree with the reviews above. I'm not much of a whisky person myself - but my husband likes the peaty ones, and has a fit if I ever have a glass - as he says what a waste it is to give it to someone who doesn't value it.  
 
I'm afraid the drink of my roots is beer, pure and simple - although that isn't my drink of choice, except when I am home and that's all that's on offer.

Written by coosh (923 comments posted) 29th May 2008
Nice the way you take the traditional nostalgic "shortbread tin" connotations of "ancestral home", and invert it to rougher roots and coarser tastes. Excellent ending. Slainte.

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