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Naiad of the Bath
By patterjack
29 May 2008
Based on a painting I  saw long ago.  And praise be, not a sonnet !  Those  poor nymphs  and  naiads -- never  a moment's peace from salacious  satyrs , sexy  shepherds , and  the grasp  of  lusty  gods!  I  thought  she deserved a little  time for once in a bathroom  by  herself !  The  one  I  noted in the painting  was  worth  peeping at  ,  though  ! 

Naiad  of  the  Bath.


Slowly she unfastens the high- girded zoster,
turns and gracefully looses her monochiton
that covers the pearly beauty of her flesh.

Here she has the luxury of her mirror
with its undistorted image of her body
free of the ripples in her maidens' spring .

A long slow turning study of herself and then,
with languorous and dainty step she glides
to be embraced by the waters of her bath;
back now to a differing element she returns,
sinuous in the water's steamy warmth.

The scented flowers and oils disposed  
around the deep tub's rim sit waiting
unneeded as enhancements of her beauty.

Relaxing, she can dismiss the satyr's constant gaze,
for there are no friendly shrubs and bushes here
to conceal his salacious leer and capering lust,
and peacefully free of his pursuit  she drowses.

Later she will arise and with fresh linens
rejoin her sisters by  the colder stream;
perhaps to enjoy there the amorous wooing
of some passing god, or even of Zeus himself.


Reviews

Written by Phil (6951 comments posted) 29th May 2008
Did you have a peep hole, Brian? :grin  
 
From its opening I was expecting a more physically descriptive piece, whereas what we get is more descriptive of action. Makes it a very fluid piece - that coupled with the fact that the pulse is never quite tied down gives this a slight sense of otherness/dreaminess. 
 
Like it very much. 
 
Phil 
 

Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 29th May 2008
This is the dream of every busy woman, I think, working women, mothers with children, or both. Just to have a quiet one hour without any demand on us, to pretend there is no worry, nothing urgent to attend to, no housework waiting for us, and just luxuriate in bath. Just reading this poem is so relaxing. We can pretend for a moment we live a fairy tale life with all these servants to serve us while we soak in flower-filled, fragrance-scented baths in some magical forest. Our job is only to beautify ourselves, and our biggest headache - the annoyance of secret admirers. 
 
Ah, back to real life! Laundry baskets are overflowing! 
 
Mia :p

Written by Veronica_Milvus (746 comments posted) 30th May 2008
Had the feel of a pre-Raphaelite painting. What an imagination. pj!

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