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Poetry
Stanley
By kitten_princess
03 December 2005

Seeing my nephew Stanley, a week after his arrival to our world. I like babies, and I think this will be his Christmas present.


Ten fingers, ten toes,
One chocolate button nose.
No teeth, gummy smile,
Faint scent of camomile,
My baby
Stanley.

An obstinate mane of hair,
A demanding regal air.
A roaring yell. at will
And the world is still
For little
Stanley.

Grasping the stars at night
While dreaming of flight
His days are mundane
Walking's too plain
For my nephew
Stanley.

Reviews

Written by Flippy_D (14 comments posted) 3rd December 2005
Pretty good until the rhythmic pattern goes slightly off-kilter in the final stanza. Not bad. First verse particularly strong. 
 

Written by spiderbaby49 (137 comments posted) 3rd January 2006
Loved this as I have a grandson called Stanley and it made me smile. 
Flippy is right about the last stanza. You could make it have more impact by losing a couple of words 
 
Grasping stars at night, 
dreaming of flight 
His days are mundane 
Walking's too plain (seems like you were struggling for a rhyme here) 
For my nephew 
Stanley. 
 
Great overall though. 
 
spidey

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