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Bobby
By maipenrai
31 May 2008
Bobby Died
Not with Volour
Not in Bravery
Bobby Died
In Pain
In Fear
and
Alone

Bobby Died
A Roadside Bomb,
A Roadside Bomb
Did For Young Bobby
Afghanistan
May 2008

Reviews

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 31st May 2008
Dispels any thought of glamour very well. 
 
Phil

Written by mia_ms_kim (1019 comments posted) 31st May 2008
Very painful. I do wonder how many do die with valour, honour and bravery etc etc. These young men, so many just little more than boys. Perhaps it's something we delude ourselves with, in order to evade reality. 
 
Mia :cry
Phil, Mia
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 1st June 2008
Thank you both for your comments. 
Bernie
Bernie
Written by wt (137 comments posted) 1st June 2008
 
Would add "far, far away from home" after Alone 
 
Best 
wt

Written by Brett (785 comments posted) 1st June 2008
A very poignant piece, Bernie. 
 
I response to the above review I would leave 'alone' alone. Perfect as it is. 
 
Cheers
Wt, Brett
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 1st June 2008
thank you both for your comments. 
 
wt, thanks for your suggestion, I wanted this to be a kind of raw statement, like a news report if you will, did think about your suggestion but in the end decided to keep it as it is. 
 
Brett, agree with you, leave it as it is. 
 
Thanks again guys. 
Bernie

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