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Forever chapter 5 for young adults
By jennistar3
01 June 2008
here's chapter five,  a supernatural romance. Like it so far? It's getting to an action(y) bit in the next chapter, it's just character development or this chapter. But hopefully it's still good and you like the characters

jennifer x

Alsyn


"I'm home," I yelled into the hall as I went to go to my room and get changed.

"We're in the kitchen!" Sarah yelled back excitedly. I heard her giggling and talking, it sure wasn't Mary unless she'd had a sex change on the way home from work.  I heard Sarah giggling; she was in her flirting mode. She was being overly girly, which just wasn't her. I dropped my bag on the floor and got changed out of my wet clothes (don't ask. Some idiot with a Slushie slammed into me, I had to walk home with blue hair and clothes, which earned me some weird stares on the bus...) being careful not to get any more of the blue gunk on my hair or anything else.

I got changed into a white blouse and black jeans and headed into the kitchen where hopefully there'd be some lasagne waiting on a plate for me. This was a speciality of Mary's. As I stepped into the kitchen, my stomach hit the floor. A mixture of joy and apprehension hit me. He was sitting on my chair. He was sat there laughing and joking like always. When he saw me, he stood up almost crushing Sarah who was cooking on the counter behind him with his (my) chair. I took in a sharp breath.


"Hey" was all I managed to say. He smiled his huge wide smile at me and pulled a chair out for me. As I was sitting down, I couldn't stop staring at him. He looked exactly the same as the last time we'd ever spoken. He was still smiling that same smile that lit up his face at me and I couldn't help but smile back at him. He tilted his head and looked me over.


"You haven't changed a bit," he said before he started cracking up. I shoved him playfully. He said our private joke. None of us had aged in centuries; we can look older if we want but we'll never actually have to age, it has its advantages but at the same time, I could never call myself human. It also means that we have to stay secretive. We'd all been chased with our fair share of pitchforks and crazed village people and weren't in any hurry for it to happen again. It was chance that brought us all together in the first place. On our travels, Sarah and I finally found Mary.

Mary in turn found Will and the two became inseparable. She seemed to know exactly who we were and came with us as soon as she saw us. We can sense each other and I realise how insane I sound but that's the best way to explain it. That's how I found Sarah. We were in the same city, she'd passed by me a few times, and there was something I recognised in her. Even though I'd never met her before she felt like an old friend. We stared each other out before going our separate ways. I bumped into her again in a much darker time, but that's a completely different story that would take far too long to explain.


The last person to join our little family was Will, the brains of the team. Anyway, it was like the Anthony I knew had come back instead of the angry jerk that I'd seen walking away from me that day. Sarah sat beside us. We talked and laughed for hours it was like old times. I wanted to stay like that forever. I never realised how much I'd missed him, and now he was right here. There were so many questions I wanted to ask him, but I had no idea where to begin. He seemed to notice this.

"So how've you guys been?" He said shrugging his shoulders. Sarah answered first.

"It's been really boring without you," she said smiling and brushing her hair past her shoulder. Most Guys would melt with that move but he seemed oblivious. Sarah's shoulders dropped and she looked past him. I decided to plug the growing silence.

"I've joined university. Literature and history. You always said I needed to get out more so...."

"You did? That's great," he said. Mary decided she wanted to join in with the conversation this time.

"What about you. You've been gone a while anywhere exciting?" She asked, leaning on the table.

"I went back home for a while, things have died down though, we can go outside and mix with ordinary people now, no pitchforks in sight" he joked. Remembering the last time, we were there, with the Beniandante.

"I never did get to apologize for that," he said.

"That's because we were all running for our lives at the time" Sarah said, "It was a log time ago now, lets start a clean slate, its been too long."

"Sure, I just wanted to clear the air."

"Consider it cleared" Sarah replied.

Reviews
me again
Written by Scrawl (80 comments posted) 13th June 2008
one typo, right at the end, you have log for long. 
 
This chapter provides a bit more insight into the group of immortals and the history they share, and the fact that although Alsyn says she can never call herself human due to her lifespan, her behaviour is just that - human. She argues, questions, falls in love, all the things people do. Including not always learning from her mistakes, A fascinating story with interesting characters, and I'm not a romance reader myself yet I find this one captivating. Well done. Keep on going, let the story unfold as well as it has to date and you have no worry about readers. at least not in my opinion.
This is wonderful.
Written by littledom2008 (95 comments posted) 13th June 2008
Ok I've now read it all to date and I got to say I loved it. Nicely written with vivid characters. 
 
D.C
One thing
Written by Thievesfire (77 comments posted) 13th June 2008
The very last two pieces of dialogue made this chapter for me. I know its hard to write scenes of talking and observation - believe me I do it a lot - and you've done it well!! 
 
Spooks 
 
XX

Written by Goddess (124 comments posted) 16th June 2008
I love the line - He was sitting on my chair It sounds so horrified, its great and the 'his (my) chair' lol 
 
 
 
Another very good chapter and I agree that the dialogue is fantastic in this chapter. 
 
 
*grins* More please!!! 
 
 
Goddess xxx

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