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Another try
By awakenedmind
02 June 2008
I've am reading the Stephen Fry book, and for me will take quite a few reads to understand and fully sink in

awakenedmind
aka
Michael

Depression sits like a big stone weight

Around your neck just waiting to break

You sometimes feel anguish and then it goes

And you get a glimpse of where to go


Sadness and tears are never far

As within your head there is a reservoir

Full of emotion and ready to burst

But always held back by a fear much worse


To show to all that you are human

But also within are full of confusion

Of what people say sometimes about you

All of which is never true


Anguish strives to win the day

As you soldier on within the affray

A battle to fight, a solution to find

But no, just another mixed up mind


Each day got through is a victory for you

The demons within have failed to break through

Emotionally tired and physically sick

As you wait for the next depression to break


An awful cycle that is hard to bear

Even harder to explain to those out there

So we struggle on and some get weaker

Then we help to make it easier


Please then think as you pass by

With smiles aplenty and not much time

A smile directed in just the right place

From your heart within and not just your face


A friendly voice, acknowledgement too

Is just the tonic to stop me feeling blue

I love to talk and be with you

And never ever then to feel blue.

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An Honest Plea
Written by Katanga (1179 comments posted) 2nd June 2008
This comes across to me as a sad and honest plea for a helping hand through depression. I hope it's not too true for you at the moment, Michael? I've been there too, and it's Hell. 
 
I think the content and the scanning are hugely better than in the last work I saw of yours. 
 
Keep it up! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John

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