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Pleasure and pain
By meadowcroft1964
03 June 2008



MY THANKS GOES TO KELLIE WHOES STORY GAVE ME THE INSPIRERATION









You can bet money
He's gone and lost his dummy
His nose runs with snot
Just a little not a lot
His crying he won't stop
"Join in"? Better not
love her fit to burst  
Time can't be reversed
Dry tears with my pinny 
Plea! Quiet be hinnie"
 Taken up this pen
Remember
Enjoy her while she young
She may drive you insane
Bringing pleasure joy and pain
Things could get a lot worst
Watch out this time two
yes you've guessed
Twins for your sins
Grand parents again
  

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Written by Turquoise-Tangerine (223 comments posted) 4th June 2008
 
Enjoy 'em while you can, I say. Cos kids grow up so fast. 
 
Childhood can't be rehearsed 
and ageing not reversed. 
 
Nice one, 
Turk.

Written by 1211kellie (177 comments posted) 4th June 2008
Really enjoyed this. A lovely poem. 
 
Well done! 8)

Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 4th June 2008
But also please remember the grin on the little face and the outstretched arms, which are meant just for you. Ahhh How much he loves you until he grows up and another woman takes your place. And you won't get the broken heart from him that you see others suffering on this page. Now I see Kellie has said what I was going to say: "Childhood can't be reversed" - but in this day and age it doesn't seem to last long.
Superb!
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 4th June 2008
I love the way your poem builds up to your final excellent last two lines. 
 
Reminds ot 'The Unbearable Lightness of Being' and the thematic idea that 'Life is not a dress rehearsal'. 
 
Cheers! 
 
John X

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