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Poetry
Abuser
By samiekins17
04 June 2008
All I want to do is cry
But no matter how hard I try
Nothing comes out
As if my eyes are dry

Thinking to myself when I'm alone
All those things you told me over the phone
Tore my heart in two
But did you care or even have a clue

You made me feel as if I was a loser
But all you were was an abuser
I still have all the scars
But no one really knows so far

All I want to do is forget
More happened then I'd like to admit
All of the pain that caused
I can't believe I didn't see all your flaws

Everything you put me through
I just pretended it wasn't true
I didn't want to believe
That all you did was deceive

I wish I could go back
Before my heart began to crack
When I actually felt happy
Now I feel so crappy

I can't believe I couldn't see
When I was with you I would never be free
All I was, was a toy to youNothing you said was ever true
When I thought we were overI got the e-mail in November

All about how I'm nothing an no one cares
All over again my heart began to tare
What I feel now is because of you
Right now I feel so blue

Do you know how much I hate myself
Or was that your plan all along?
I don't know how I'll get through this
Or if I ever willI will try as hard as I can
But this was never the plan

Reviews

Written by Turquoise-Tangerine (95 comments posted) 4th June 2008
I've got a generic review that sits perfectly on this poem. 
 
Kids and their crushes, aye!  
 
Wait till your about thirty with a couple of ankle-biters, you'll look back and larf at puppy love.  
 
Chin up geezer,  
Turk 
 
PS, your layout is rubbish. Stick it up in lines, mate.
WHY Turquoise-Tangerine
Written by meadowcroft1964 (102 comments posted) 6th June 2008
please explain why you would deliberately go out of your way to hurt someone that you don't know. You must be a very angry person and you have my sympathy. I may not be intelligent but i know your reviews aren't about freedom of speech. It takes brains to get your views heard without causing offensive I think it's called diplomacy. I guess your just no diplomat

Written by Turquoise-Tangerine (95 comments posted) 7th June 2008
Hey, look on the positive side - at least I gave you a review! Now it’s two!!
Wow
Written by samiekins17 (4 comments posted) 13th July 2008
You know you don't have to be so mean. Honestly apparently you have no idea what this poem is about Turquoise-Tangerine now I can take critism but seriously I have wanted crap like that for someone who had no clue then I'd ask Jessica Simpson for an opinion.

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