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Brilliant!
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 6th June 2008 |
Another stonker, Veroica!
Fascinating initial questions - a poet's disposition towards abject misery or tother way round? Hmmmm! Much pondering to be had there!
You write so well that almost every line could be a quotation . . .
Dashed if I can find it though! It looks like it could be,
"We count ourselves by all Immoratals cursed"
But I can't pin it down . . . I shall persevere!
Anyway, thank you for posting another great work - I shall be revisiting for some time to come!
Cheers!
Katie X |
Yeats?
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 6th June 2008 |
Sorry to missspell you above, Veronica!
Is it the following?
The Lover Mourns For The Loss Of Love
Pale brows, still hands and dim hair,
I had a beautiful friend
And dreamed that the old despair
Would end in love in the end:
She looked in my heart one day
And saw your image was there;
She has gone weeping away.
Ooooh - typing that has given me goose pimples.
But how does he get away with what most would call a clumsy repetition of 'end' in line 4? Mystery!
Anyway, was this your quotation?
If not, I'll try again, but it was wonderful to revisit Yeats!
Thank you!
Cheers!
KTJ |
Pleasantly paradoxical
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 6th June 2008 |
in content and delightful to see the use of the sonnet form to advance the argument .
Taxonomy totally technical !
Interesting to see you skirt the hyperbole !!
Very smooth and accomplished .
patterjack |
O misery me
Written by fellpony (1749 comments posted) 6th June 2008 |
"Heaven help us, what's a poet? Something that can't go to bed without writing a song about it." (Dorothy L Sayers)
KTJ, how dare you mis-spell Veronica as Verruca, shame on you.
I think you may have got hold of an element of truth, V. I remember being asked to discuss this at college, by a lecturer (lecherer?) who opined that poetry fed on passion unfulfilled, because once it was fulfilled there was nothing to write about. I disagreed, and still do, but it is very hard to write truthful, yet unmawkish poetry about reciprocated love.
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Fellpony
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 6th June 2008 |
Ha! Jolly glad I didn't put Verruca.
Next thing, you'll be accusing me of calling her Erotica.
Tempting though it is, I shall refrain.
Think I'll settle for Heroica next time my poor brain outpaces my two-fingered typing!
Cheers Hellpony! Ha! Ha! Ha!
KTJ |
Written by Veronica_Milvus (768 comments posted) 6th June 2008 |
Thank you for your reviews.
And thank you for my new assortment of inappropriate nicknames!
For the quotation, Katie, think 1960s, and musical rather than strictly poetic. |
Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 6th June 2008 |
Hi V,
'surrender to the void' is a sort of mini quote from the 60's...'Tomorrow Never Knows', best Beatles recording, if not their best song.
Sorry KTJ if that's a spoiler! |
Written by Veronica_Milvus (768 comments posted) 6th June 2008 |
you get the prize, Nathan!
KTJ was looking for something a lot tougher than that. |
Miserable Poets
Written by CharlieDee (8 comments posted) 6th June 2008 |
"Is it that poets always have miserable love affairs?
Or is it that those who have miserable love affairs become poets?"
I think it's the latter! I know that at least in my case it's the misery of love that inspires me to write  nullnull |
Gosh!
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 6th June 2008 |
Well , shiver me timbers!
I would never have got that!
I'm still more than happy with the Yeats idea though!
Ha!
Cheers!
John |
Written by Brett (1001 comments posted) 6th June 2008 |
Your usual high standard, V, and very well argued. Never thought I'd see 'taxonomy' in a verse - good for you.
A sad finishing couplet.
Brett |
Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 6th June 2008 |
| Beautifully written Veronica, with great care taken as to metre. It does make a poem shine doesn't it? I'm not sure whether poets have more or less trouble with love than other human beings, but they do tend to talk about it more I think. Tasonomy? You can see this was written by a scientific person. |
Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 6th June 2008 |
Enjoyed this so much, Veronica. I hope I was supposed to laugh - because I did.
And why is it that love lost often inspires the most god awful poetry imaginable?
Phil |
Written by Veronica_Milvus (768 comments posted) 6th June 2008 |
Phil, you ask a good and noble question.
Emo angst was what I wrote when I was 17. Love lost still feels as crap when you're nearly 45, but one hopes to express it more originally.
Yes, sort of funny, but sort of sad too.
Brett, Josie, pj, bit a of a showing off, invoking taxonomy. Trying to say that miserable love lives almost define poets as a species.
thanks for your reviews. |
Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 6th June 2008 |
Seems so true. Loved the last two lines! I wonder if this is true of all writers, not just poets. Contentment and happiness just don't seem to inspire the bleeding pen!
Mia  |
Just made aware...
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 6th June 2008 |
... once again , of the Song of Solomon -- now there was a poet who took his love life seriously and with much pleasure -- bellies like heaps of wheat surrounded by lilies , navels like winecups and all that sexy stuff.
Of course, Freudians , and some , some biblical commentators , go just that little bit further , as well.
So not all poets are lovelorn !
And taking heed of the wisdom of Solomon I am happy in my love life too , all bejewelled dreams 
patterjack |
Very fine indeed!
Written by Talisker (1336 comments posted) 7th June 2008 |
A lovely. thoughtful little sonnet, V.
I particularly liked the finishing couplet. A fitting coup de grace, of which Billy Waggadagger himself would have been proud!
Heartening to witness some truly fine writing on GW.
Oli |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 7th June 2008 |
That's funny I really thought I had commented on this, but let's just call it a premature senior moment.
This really ticks all the boxes for me. A clever witty piece with some really tight rhymes and a fierce rhythm. As Oli says, a stand out piece and with a killer ending which puts it in the top league.
But I must say comedians are notoriously sad, unhappy angst-ridden people and leave poets standing in the misery stakes
jane |
Written by Veronica_Milvus (768 comments posted) 7th June 2008 |
Billy who?
and thanks, Oli, for the flattering review. The finishing couplet is usually where my sonnets start from. |
As good as it gets.
Written by Adam_S (11 comments posted) 18th June 2008 |
This a great poem V that does capture the emotions that most including myself put into there love poems.
To the answer the question posed I believe poets get hurt more because we look at life differently and are usually more open to sharing our feelings with the world and people around us.
Loved the poem and the theme keep them coming. |
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