This is just a little piece I composed in my head at work and wrote down when I got home. No real point here, just something to pass the time.
Sometimes I think about the histories of the bottles and cans that briefly pass and then move on to the next step in their afterlife journey toward reincarnation; who sorted them, how they got here, but mostly further back than even that, to before they were discarded, about the people who drank from them and the circumstances under which they did so. That may seem odd to you, and it probably
is odd, to spend so much time thinking about something that warrants little consideration at all. When you do what I do you spend a lot of time in your own head, little mental stimulation besides the simple tasks you are performing, tasks that don't take up a whole lot of CPU. Your mind can travel down some pretty obscure corridors when left to its own devices, and the architecture of my imagination is like the Winchester mansion, vestibules opening into strangely furnished rooms, endless, winding hallways leading to nowhere, serving no functional purpose save to consume the minutes and hours spent wandering them. In the abscence of distraction a mind will grow weary of its own company and begin to bicker with itself, especially if you have a mind like a caffeinated jackrabbit.
Some the cans are strays, bleached from their time on highway shoulders prior to being rescued by a bum looking for something to fill his belly or a bottle of something to warm it. Some have scraps of paper taped to them, names in large, wavy letters, written in a child's unpracticed hand. I wonder about the people who emptied them, if any of them are expecting a child or carrying a child they don't expect, if any of them are now deceased or will be soon, if any were drank by celebrities, people I know, people I haven't met yet, or even by me. About the secrets unconfessed by the throats that swallowed whatever was inside. How many of the countless bottles and cans that pass by me on their way to somewhere else, tens of thousands, hundreds of thousands, were tilted at the lips of rapists, pedophiles, murderers? I wonder how many of the vacant bottles of cheap liquor were stolen, tucked under coats or slipped inside sleeves, and if their contents granted temporary asylum from the demons the drinker was running from, or if they only made a bad situation worse.
A million little histories, a million stories no one would bother to tell, converging momentarily, sifted through my hands and then gone, mysteries intact. I invent myself another corridor, another room, and I decorate them with all the things I'll never need to know.
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Written by Phil (8763 comments posted) 8th June 2008 |
I liked the mansion analogy, although I think I've heard it before somewhere. It does do a rather good job of placing an imaginary context to an abstract idea. I have to confess - I too sometimes find myself wandering like this - though at work I never have the time. Enjoyed the read. Phil |
Written by Merioneth (137 comments posted) 8th June 2008 |
Lately I've been having a problem with having ideas someone else has had already. I'll think of a new word, usually a portmanteau, and I'll google it and sure enough somebody already had the idea. So I pose this question; if you come up with an idea completely on your own, and then find out someone else has also had the same idea, can you still claim the idea as your own? It is possible that you have heard the mansion analogy before, but I can honestly say I had the idea independent of anyone else's pre-existing analogy. Was it the Winchester mansion? Or just a mansion? ~Meri |
Written by Phil (8763 comments posted) 8th June 2008 |
Good point, M. It wasn't the Winchester Mansion. (I can't remember where I came across it) I reckon just because someone got there first doesn't mean you can't have it independently. And it works so well - I wouldn't worry about it. Phil Have you tried unipair? I only ask as I was thinking about it this morning while parking about a thousand cars. (Long story) |
Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 8th June 2008 |
What a fascinating mind you have, Merioneth. I don't think I can look at another empty discarded can or bottle again without thinking about the unspoken story of its drinker. I feel as if I've taken a walk through a maze in your brain! About being original: I read in some writers' forum that it is a good exercise to put ourselves in the mind of another writer and write as if we are that person, even rewrite their stuff and see what we come up with. I've messed around with 'interview with the vampire', and find it a fascinating exercise. Mia |
New to me... Written by patterjack (1927 comments posted) 8th June 2008 |
... I think!. I have a vague recollection of the Winchester mansion, but cannot be sure. Not that that matters one scrap-- the main body of your story is both interesting and well written . You have caught a human trait - the wandering and wondering mind , very well. Gentle and contemplative . An interesting read. patterjack |
Written by coosh (1156 comments posted) 12th June 2008 |
I think the above comment of "gentle and contemplative" probably sums it up best. Particularly liked the ending of a "million little histories". The connections became randomly linked, but the use of the word "decorate" suggested you had achieved a certain degree of organisation or order in respect of these thoughts. The notion of mansion rather than labyrinth gives the idea more of limits and perhaps control. (Isn't the Winchester thing some ghost-related story?) As regards creative writing, most ideas are directly or indirectly copied to some extent (you're not stealing a patent for a pencil sharpener) - the way they are developed and presented then becomes the key factor. The current words buzzing around in the back of the mind are "Algerian lighthouse-keepers" - as with Phil, another long story. Enjoyable read.
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Extraordinary! Written by Katanga (4169 comments posted) 12th June 2008 |
Hello again Merioneth! I find this extraordinarily well written. It's this 'off-beat' kind of thinking that can lead to great creative writing . . . Hope to see more of your poems soon!? All the best, Cheers! John X |
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