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By CharlieDee
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08 June 2008 |
The din of motors, crowds and feelings
That fill my head and pound its sides
Now quieten down and fade away,
Like the geometric patterns
That grow smaller and paler
When the plane takes off unholy ground.
The boxes and the hard edges
Slowly replaced with curves of hope
And a boundless opportunity.
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Life's Headache?
Written by Katanga (1229 comments posted) 18th June 2008 |
Hmmmm!
Hey, Charlie! Do you regret or celebrate 'the boxes and hard edges'?
Maybe you leave it ambiguous, which is good?
There is some kind of desperate positivity here, which I celebrate - but could be more explicit?
Clumsy me - I love the 'curves of hope' after the 'hard edges'.
You could expand this?
Love is a life-long headache!
And I should know, because I've been there, but not very often . . . . (Morrissey misquote!)
Ha! Ha! Ha!
Cheers!
KTJ X
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