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Poetry
Let it be
By ReflectingGod
11 June 2008
Caring isn't caring unless someone knows.
Love can be found but not lost if it was never spoken of.


I wanna look away,
I want you to go away.

You'll never see me,
The real me.

I tried talking
And end up confessing.

That didn't make a difference,
That didn't get me anywhere.

I wanna cry sometimes,
But that's the pathetic thing to do.

I want to die all the time,
But that's the cowardly way.

Why?

Because I like you, I want you...
I can't have you.

I desire what I can never have,
You too like what you can't get.

I am just  so screwed.

You are a nice guy, you are a sweet guy...
You are too cute for me.

Don't get me wrong.You are a nice,
but still a jock.

I am somewhat pretty
But, still...A weirdo.

I've known that all of high school.

I've wasted two months of my life on you,
I could never make out a word.

My friends teased me,
You bewitched me.

Now it's the last day
And I still don't know what to say.

I'll try to catch up to my senior affection
But I fear I am too late.

Time has run through my fingers,
Each grain of sand is a second of my life.

It pours to the floor.

Mind over matter, is that what they say?
Mind over matter is the only way.

Screw uneven beats and breathes,
Screw emotions.

I need to move,
I need to speak.

To hold your attention for a second...
Will be a blessing (or a curse?)

To taste that I can't have is so bitter sweet.

To have not to hold,
Is what they keep telling me.

You'll never love, they say,
You can try, they agree.

But you will be crushed in turn, they warn.

I have to try,
I have to strive out of my reach...

To place a hand on your arm,
To caress your handsome visage.

I fear of letting go,
To never get back up.

To drown in your absense.

The last day has arrived
And time is letting me go.

I have to call your name,
I have to smile and say...

Hi or just curl up and die.

I'll ask for an embrace
And you'll comply.

And then I will have to say...
'Good-Bye'.

And take my leave before you see me...
See me cry.

Good-Bye, good-bye...

Good-Bye.






Reviews
So Much Feeling!
Written by Katanga (1237 comments posted) 11th June 2008
Hello Reflecting God! 
 
There is so much strong feeling in this that I cannot possibly comment - except to say that I hope you are all right? 
 
However, as far as poetry goes, I'm afraid it is shambolic - you need to order your thoughts and then order them into some kind of poetic form . . . 
 
I'm not being horrid to you, I hope - I've struggled with my emotions and my writing for nearly 45 years. 
 
Please, 'crystallise' what you want to say - then post it! 
 
All the best! 
 
John X

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