Once again a vocabulary exercise of sorts. Silly title, perhaps An Ode to the Ocular would be better. Whatever, this one was more difficult to write somehow. Oh well, sound and kinaesthesia to go to cover the spectrum. And they promise to be even more difficult, I fear.
Believing in Seeing When you're looking at people, try not to starefor they may think that you're only trying to pryand return your look with an angry glarebelieving perhaps that you might be a spy ! When observing those round you, I'll give you this hint : goggling isn't the right way to do it, for it isn't good manners to ogle or squint and if you're caught at it you might indeed rue it! Gaze if you must, but never too hard ; Peek quietly at them but try not to peer, as a friendly glance, with a pleasant regardwon't bring down an opinion on you that's severe. Nature also deserves a discerning deep scan, so reconnoiter it first and then contemplate; study closely around you all that you can, witness its wonders before it's too late. Things glimpsed disappear in less than a wink; things that for a moment your vision can catch may vanish before you are able to blink, so behold them while you have the time left to watch. As you peep in this verse, you can now see the way to use words that are ocular as you survey. |
Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 11th June 2008 | Ah, another enjoyable and witty piece, pj! This made me understand just how many ways we "look" at things. And frankly how many times have I "ogled" at unusually dressed people with strange hairdos out of the corners of my eyes while elbowing my hubby to look in the direction of 3 o'clock. My boy is more straight forward. He stares and points and says, 'Mummy, that girl has funny hair.' The 4th & 5th stanzas are actually a wisdom piece. It is so true. There are somethings no words or camera can capture. A very poignant piece for little and "big" children alike. Mia | Good encouragement Written by patterjack (1429 comments posted) 11th June 2008 | I was beginning to feel that these verses were a bit of a chore really! However , no doubt to the dismay of many I will battle on. They are after all little more than vocabulary exercises , but if they bring a few new words to the atention of students , it can't do any harm . I hope ! Thank you Mia !!!! | If Written by patterjack (1429 comments posted) 12th June 2008 | If a student can pick up words about seeing , such as ogle , discern , regard then i am happy with the verse. patterjack | Good Words! Written by Katanga (1497 comments posted) 12th June 2008 | I like this, but what sort of 'student' are you aiming at? I do this sort of thing regularly with adult students who are studying English. Are you writing for them, or for 'English' primary school children? I think it makes a difference, and I think we need to know! Cheers! John | Writing for whom ? Written by patterjack (1429 comments posted) 12th June 2008 | I have many times said that I basically write for myself -- in the case of my senses verses I had set myself a challenge to use a wide range of appropriate words . If students of any ages can pick up a word new to them , then that is a good thing. And you can even count any reader as a student if you like I think we need to know That has an unnecessarily admonitory tone to me . Who are the we and why the need ? patterjack | Sorry, but . . . Written by Katanga (1497 comments posted) 12th June 2008 | . . . I don't wish to 'admonish' you! Lordy! However . . . You say 'I basically write for myself' Fine! A lot of us do just that. But then why put it on the 'For Kids' section of this site?! If you write for kids, then you have to think of THEM, not you yourself - put your own angst on the 'adult' section - and then you'll probably get rated amongst the teeenagers bemoaning lost love - is that what you want? If so, so be it . . . I feel old at 51, but I'm not going to take it out on people on GW, let alone children. Food for thought, patterjack? So sorry, Brian, but you have made me irritable . . Respect! I think that you're angry, and I don't know why . . . There is no malice in my heart, either generally, or towards you personally . . . Cheers! John X | For kids etc Written by patterjack (1429 comments posted) 12th June 2008 | I write for fun and myself. There is no category called *For Myself * Therefore since the verse is also intended to extend vocabulary,it seems best suited here for fun teaching If you can find any angstin it , please indicate where, as I am NOT going to take it out on people on GW, let alone children. Do not patronise me with Food for thought, patterjack? Respect? , for what and for whom? A meaningless piece of cant . patterjack | Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 16th October 2008 | | Really liked this! A great way of helping children to expand their vocab! | Begun as a fun exercise Written by patterjack (1429 comments posted) 16th October 2008 | and I did manage to get through the five senses and added Kinaesthesia But it was really a bit of a bore in the end as so many * set * pieces are patterjack |
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