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Bird of Prey
By awakenedmind
11 June 2008

A bird of prey hovers up there
It soars and dives and curves mid air
Its eyes are sharp its talon’s too
As it keeps looking for its food



It sees some movement in the grass
And fold its wings and falls down fast
Just before it hits the ground
It opens its wings and pulls back fast



Its legs move forward and talons too
And coils it feet around its food
A mighty flap and up it goes
Another prey between its toes



To the nest he does fly
And feeds the chicks with all his pride
Some for mum he shares his food
And then flies off for food anew

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Written by Katanga (1163 comments posted) 11th June 2008
. . . until the last stanza. 
 
Sorry, but - 'To the nest he does fly' is, to my humble ear, simply tortured English. 
 
I feel your point in this, but try and unravel the poetry and say it straight! Good poetry takes time . . . 
 
Cheers! 
 
Patronising John X

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