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Elderly Table Games
By DaleGorder
12 June 2008

In a nursing home for the elderly, at a table made for five.

Three of us sat chatting, two barely alive.

"I like this ice cream," one said, while eating marshmallow jel.

A silver haired old droop-er, babbled on of God an Hell.


An in the mist of memory, and the mind-fields in between.

I felt the expressions of the ignored, robbed by the competent  fiend.

The pain of a mind having seen it all, just waiting for the end.

And the laughter trapped behind the eyes, of speechless dying men.


In the middle of the battle, of what life is all about.

A paralyzed mind began to speak, and then it shouted out!

I can die when I want, no one left to say.

I can see the path ahead, and someone leads the way.


Then a bony finger raised, and pointed straight at me.

Your the one who leads the way, you go before me.

I looked down and saw myself, older than I knew.

We said goodbye to table friends, and left the lively two.


Reviews

Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 11th June 2008
This made me stop and think. The table of five elderly people, is an alien story to me now, but the fact is we are all getting old, every single one of us. And not one of us will escape death. One day the finger will be pointing at me.  
 
Makes me think. 
 
Mia :roll

Written by DaleGorder (46 comments posted) 12th June 2008
Thanks Mia... 
 
Yes I love writing poems that make people think. I think story line is important in poetry, but that's just me I'm sure. :)

Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 12th June 2008
I cannot imagine anything worse than sitting around a table talking about death pointing a finger at you. It makes me think that I would like to go on to heaven well before that time. Perhaps if they did as much to stimulate the minds of people in the nursing homes as they do for children in their school desks, this would not be happening. I have been into nursing homes where people have been sitting in chairs all lined up around the walls with the tele going and nobody watching it. If they did that in school classrooms, what would parents say? On our Today programme in the morning they have been talking about this. It is cruelty beyond words. Even people in their twenties would die in conditions like this. Absolute boredom beyond boredom!!

Written by lovelysarah1984 (82 comments posted) 12th June 2008
That's powerful stuff! I really, really enjoyed this, it's very poignant, very moving and it definately makes you stop and think! 
 
Great stuff!

Written by Robru (272 comments posted) 13th June 2008
I am very concerned at the content of this poem. Five elderly at a table, each just waiting to die. Is that really the best we can do for our parents and grandparents? that is really what it means. I am a bit emotional about this aspect of life because I am now 75 years old and am too busy with living to think about my eventual end. It will come one day, probably with great surprise to everyone. I just hope I don't leave any unfinished business behind.

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