If anyone can find and fit a better last rhyme please tell me . And there are hundreds of other words you could add if you want to rhyme them in!
Here's to Ears -- The Good Word On Hearing
Let you and I for the moment suppose
that ( Into your hankie please!) you blow your nose.
What sound does it make? would you perhaps say
it
trumpets or
blares? does it
blast, honk or
bray?
Take those iPod earplugs out of each ear
and listen around you (
if you can still hear!)
There's all kinds of loud noise that
rattles and
clatters!
Hear the
sibilant hiss as fat
sputters and
spatters!
There's a
gulping and
gurgling as some kids
munch their lunch
while others go to it with a
grind and a
crunch,
not
squealing or
giggling in the
hubbub of sound
that is
clashing and
clanging in the playspace around.
Some people will
babble, or
bubble or
whine
mumble or
grunt or
slurp soup as they dine,
and mechanical worlds will
buzz, hum or
grate
roar, whoosh, click and
plop, or just
resonate,
boom, jingle, honk, crackle and
whirr ,screech or
whizz,
thud, smack, thump, ping, twang, go
snick or go
fizz--
As for music, and animals, all the words that you seek
you will find in the category
onomatopoeic!
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Written by Goddess (124 comments posted) 12th June 2008 |
Hello! I liked this very much! That is a lot of sounds and I'm very impressed with your rhyme scheme. I dont really have much else to say except that I enjoyed it!! Goddess x |
Fun piece only Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 12th June 2008 |
So many words and so little time to put them together ! lol patterjack |
oh and Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 12th June 2008 |
I didn't say thanks ! patterjack |
Brilliant Written by lovelysarah1984 (81 comments posted) 12th June 2008 |
| That's a brilliant piece of work patterjack, really made me smile reading it! |
Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 12th June 2008 |
Thoroughly enjoyed - and would be useful to me in a lesson - if you don't mind. Probably early next year or within the next few weeks. (Planning all to pot!) Please let me know if I can use it. Phil |
Of course Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 12th June 2008 |
Thanks for asking ! I have no qualms about anyone using my work - especially for teaching !! Glad you liked it , and if you want to modify it , by all means do so . And if the other senses verses are useful , use them too ! patterjack
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Smile away ! Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 12th June 2008 |
It was meant as fun and to be perhaps humorously educational I had fun chasing up the words -- and it would be a great pleasure to me if others found the result pleasing to them patterjack |
Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 12th June 2008 |
Thanks, Brian. When I use it, I'll let you know how it goes down. Phil |
Written by Brett (785 comments posted) 12th June 2008 |
Wonderful fun, Brian, rhymes that children will amuse at, and we can adore. Phil - I'd like to hear how this goes down, too. Cheers |
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 12th June 2008 |
| Brian, for me this was an exceptionally good poem, which I know beyond doubt children would love. As you know, I've written on particular themes for children in their classes, and here in Britain our children's laureate, Michael Rosen, wants poetry in every lesson as a centrepiece to lessons. This would make a really good centrepiece. Great. I guess poetry is part of your National Curriculum in Australia as well. Is it? |
Words Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 12th June 2008 |
The important thing for me has been the presentation of words about the sense -- it is more than anything a vocabulary exercise. Sound is a good sense for developing words showing onomatopoea and I have deliberately omitted many words to do with music -- such as tootle. There is scope there for anyone who wishes to go further . I am no longer au fait with national curricula , I fear . patterjack |
Brett Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 12th June 2008 |
Thanks -- fun is the secondary object , but if you can teach by laughter it is a great way to go patterjack |
Fantastic! Written by Katanga (1229 comments posted) 12th June 2008 |
Okay Brian! This is really good, and I agree with the above reviewers! Apologies for my crossness with you previous post . . . Cheers! John X |
Written by mia_ms_kim (1019 comments posted) 12th June 2008 |
This is brilliant. Fun as well as educational, the best way to learn. The kind of poem perfect for school text books in my opinion. Since I've been helping my child with homework etc, I've become more aware of what children respond to. Loved this one, pj. Mia |
Written by ainsel (48 comments posted) 14th June 2008 |
If this was a piece of music it would have a marked but gradual accellerando starting from the fourth couplet from the end. And a massive crescendo as well. It's splendidly aural. It's a lively piece and would make a very entertaining recitation. ainsel |
thanks ainsel Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 14th June 2008 |
Normally i make sure I read my stuff aloud in an attempt to clear up any awkward lines. My own rhythms do not always jell with those of others , I have found !!! Thanks for pointing out the musical relevance of an accelerando to a crescendo . That had never occurred to me -- it's a happy accident ! patterjack |
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