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Here's To Ears -The Good Word On Hearing
By patterjack
12 June 2008
If  anyone can find and fit a better last  rhyme please tell me . And there are hundreds of other  words you could add if you want to rhyme them in!

Here's  to  Ears --  The Good Word On Hearing

Let you and I for the moment suppose
that ( Into  your  hankie please!)  you blow your nose.

What sound does it make? would you perhaps say
it trumpets or blares? does it blast, honk or bray?

Take those iPod earplugs out of each ear
and listen around you ( if you can still  hear!)  

There's all kinds of loud noise that rattles and clatters!
Hear the sibilant hiss as fat sputters and spatters!

There's a gulping and gurgling as some kids munch their lunch
while others go to it with a grind and a crunch,

not squealing or giggling in the hubbub of sound
that is clashing and clanging in the playspace around.

Some people will babble, or bubble or whine 
mumble or grunt or slurp soup as they dine,

and mechanical worlds will buzz, hum or grate
roar, whoosh, click and plop,  or just resonate,

boom, jingle, honk, crackle and whirr ,screech or whizz,
thud, smack, thump, ping,  twang, go snick or go fizz--

As for music, and animals, all the words that you seek
you will find in the category onomatopoeic!

Reviews

Written by Goddess (124 comments posted) 12th June 2008
Hello! 
 
I liked this very much! That is a lot of sounds and I'm very impressed with your rhyme scheme. 
 
I dont really have much else to say except that I enjoyed it!! 
 
 
Goddess x
Fun piece only
Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 12th June 2008
So many words and so little time to put them together ! lol 
 
patterjack
oh and
Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 12th June 2008
I didn't say thanks !  
 
patterjack
Brilliant
Written by lovelysarah1984 (81 comments posted) 12th June 2008
That's a brilliant piece of work patterjack, really made me smile reading it!

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 12th June 2008
Thoroughly enjoyed - and would be useful to me in a lesson - if you don't mind. Probably early next year or within the next few weeks. (Planning all to pot!) 
 
Please let me know if I can use it. 
 
Phil
Of course
Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 12th June 2008
Thanks for asking ! 
 
I have no qualms about anyone using my work - especially for teaching !!  
 
Glad you liked it , and if you want to modify it , by all means do so . 
 
And if the other senses verses are useful , use them too ! 
 
patterjack 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
Smile away !
Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 12th June 2008
It was meant as fun and to be perhaps humorously educational 
I had fun chasing up the words -- and it would be a great pleasure to me if others found the result pleasing to them 
 
patterjack

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 12th June 2008
Thanks, Brian. When I use it, I'll let you know how it goes down. 
 
Phil

Written by Brett (785 comments posted) 12th June 2008
Wonderful fun, Brian, rhymes that children will amuse at, and we can adore.  
 
Phil - I'd like to hear how this goes down, too. 
 
Cheers

Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 12th June 2008
Brian, for me this was an exceptionally good poem, which I know beyond doubt children would love. As you know, I've written on particular themes for children in their classes, and here in Britain our children's laureate, Michael Rosen, wants poetry in every lesson as a centrepiece to lessons. This would make a really good centrepiece. Great. I guess poetry is part of your National Curriculum in Australia as well. Is it?
Words
Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 12th June 2008
The important thing for me has been the presentation of words about the sense -- it is more than anything a vocabulary exercise. 
 
Sound is a good sense for developing words showing onomatopoea 
and I have deliberately omitted many words to do with music -- such as tootle. There is scope there for anyone who wishes to go further . 
 
I am no longer au fait with national curricula , I fear . 
 
patterjack
Brett
Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 12th June 2008
Thanks -- fun is the secondary object , but if you can teach by laughter it is a great way to go 
 
patterjack
Fantastic!
Written by Katanga (1229 comments posted) 12th June 2008
Okay Brian! This is really good, and I agree with the above reviewers! 
 
Apologies for my crossness with you previous post . . . 
 
Cheers! 
 
John X

Written by mia_ms_kim (1019 comments posted) 12th June 2008
This is brilliant. Fun as well as educational, the best way to learn. The kind of poem perfect for school text books in my opinion. Since I've been helping my child with homework etc, I've become more aware of what children respond to. Loved this one, pj. 
 
Mia 8)

Written by ainsel (48 comments posted) 14th June 2008
If this was a piece of music it would have a marked but gradual accellerando starting from the fourth couplet from the end. And a massive crescendo as well. It's splendidly aural. 
 
It's a lively piece and would make a very entertaining recitation. 
 
ainsel
thanks ainsel
Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 14th June 2008
Normally i make sure I read my stuff aloud in an attempt to clear up any awkward lines. My own rhythms do not always jell with those of others , I have found !!!  
 
Thanks for pointing out the musical relevance of an accelerando to a crescendo . That had never occurred to me -- it's a happy accident ! 
 
patterjack

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