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Poetry
Half Life
By NathanRoberts
12 June 2008



In winter they're like old men
clasping at the edge of pools
stony limbed, angular,
about to take a dive.
A dozen trees with branches
cut off.

On summer days like this,
when petrol fumes dilate and shiver,
they're still half-trees
as if the air had turned on it's provider,
gnawing at the candy-floss jade -
leaves that cannot grow beyond
the half-width of walk-way,
and like petulant children
dragged from the promise of play
their sticky resin pods
cling to the path in protest.

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fine imagery
Written by patterjack (1196 comments posted) 12th June 2008
Very expressive of how I myslef feel when I see the trees mangled for the sake of power lines. 
 
Well done 
 
patterjack

Written by Brett (785 comments posted) 12th June 2008
Enjoyed this, Nathan, particularly the first stanza - very powerful imagery. Also love the final four lines. 
 
Cheers
Thanks
Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 13th June 2008
Cheers!

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