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By Katanga
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13 June 2008 |
This is a poem NOT WRITTEN BY ME.
It was written by my great friend and 'mentor' KEITH.
I don't know if this is acceptable on GW?
I shall probably never do it again . . .
The reason?
Simply that I think it is brilliant, and I would like you guys to encourage him to join GW.
I've known him for twenty one and a half very good years, and he's been 'hiding his light under a bushel.'
If this sounds patronising, Keith, so be it . . . Sorry!
I love you, and I love your poetry.
I keep re-reading it and I am . . . Speechlees!
Comments PLEASE!
Cheers!
John (KTJ) XXX
Hints of Autumn
Hints of autumn hang reckless in your hair . . .
I, who tamed them once,
and shared the summer that they saw,
am helpless now to reach them.
Spring sparkles in your eye
for a surface-second -
a single seed
rootless and unrouted -
gone now, and no harvest gathered . . .
The seasons wrecked,
and only winter in your hair.
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Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 13th June 2008 | A poem to mull on. I think this poem has a unique sort of beauty. The poet seems to be gazing at someone whom he once loved (may yet still love), who now seems out of reach. He seems to be remembering in that gaze all the seasons they'd shared together, but now can no longer share for some reason (the beloved is ill?) - thus it's just winter now. To compare Spring to seed and harvest was poignant.
Only thing that jarred was 'wrecked'. The seasons, to me, don't seem wrecked or wasted or even lost. They seem treasured though now misty and can only be grasped for only a moment.
Your friend has a beautiful mind, I think.
Mia  | Insight - Mia!
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 13th June 2008 | Mia - thank you!
Your insight is amazing - I won't go into it here, but you've hit the aesthetic nail on the head!
Please keep reviewing us!
Love,
John XXXX | Beautiful Mind Mia?
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 13th June 2008 | Yes, he does have one! But I think he would be embarrassed to be told that! Ha!
At the risk of embarrassing you yourself, I think that you also have a beautiful mind.
I mean it - I've read hundreds of your reviews and some of your work . . .
Lots of love and respect . . .
Thank you for encouraging me and others on GW!
John XXX |
Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 14th June 2008 | | What Mia has said is absolutely right John. She does have wonderful insight. I also wonder why he used the word "reckless in your hair" for hints of autumn gold in the hair - the auburns, the chestnut, the golds - is a wonderful colour. Mine used to be that colour - once! Was this a poem of lost love? I think so. |
Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 14th June 2008 | I like this very much. There is depth to the thinking behind the words and layers of meaning in them - if I'm reading correctly. A higher standard than many on the site.
Phil |
Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 14th June 2008 | | I would welcome more contributions from Keith. Enjoyed this. It's a poem of some depth and mystery, I think. I liked the use of the word 'wrecked'...surprising rather than jarring. I thought the first stanza was slightly stronger than the second. Slightly overdoes the alliteration in that second stanza? Not sure about 'unrouted'? |
Written by Veronica_Milvus (768 comments posted) 16th June 2008 | Hope Keith joins us on GW!
Some great stuff here. Quite mealancholy but very beautiful.
I get my reckless hints of autumn topped up at the hair salon, for fear of encroaching winter at the temples. Rage, rage against the dying of the light... | In luck V.!
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 16th June 2008 | Yes, I think we're in luck - you and I have already reviewed his further offerings!
Ho!
Cheers!
John X |
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