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Chapter Four
Nightshade hated sitting in the back of the wagon. She always did. She hated the way that the cobbled roads threw everyone in the back around. Of course it was typical that Morana and the seemingly selfish Delano would get front seats. This was why she preferred to walk or to ride. Or to fly. Her thoughts drifted to the Dragon Clan, wondering whether she would ever have the chance to fly upon the great dragons that trailed the Half-Breeds’ skies. She doubted that she would for more reasons than one. If her father caught word that his long lost daughter was planning on visiting he would lock up every egg in sight of his whole kingdom. Nightshade sighed heavily at the thought. Her father would never let her own a dragon of her own after she had been brought up by Pure-Breeds...
How wonderful it would be to touch its dark, cold scales! To help it learn to fly. To teach it to breathe fire over all the lands. To help them to be free from the magic that the Dragon Half-Breeds hold them prisoner with. Phillip had never let her go near Half-Breed territory with a fear that she would be torched the second she stepped a foot on their grounds and when Nightshade desperately pointed out that nobody would recognise her, he had dismissed it with a wave of his hand.
‘What are you thinking about?’ Asked a gentle voice. She snapped herself out of her thoughts to stare up at Lila. She sat up a little straighter, wondering whether it was a trick question.
‘Why don’t you tell me? You’re the mind reader.’
Lila gave her a patient smile, pushing her black curls out of her face.
‘I can only work on lower powered-beings. Your mind’s barriers are much harder to breaks.’ Lila glanced over at Allard with a tainted smile. ‘Allard, fancy breaking someone’s mind today?’
The man glared at her then looked away from the women as Lila gave a wicked smile. Nightshade watched as Lila looked ready to continue her explanation but she was quite relieved when it was obvious that the girl wasn’t going to say anymore. She didn’t like the mind reader but she didn’t know why. Perhaps it was the offhanded way that Lila threw herself at all the men they’d passed from Morana’s tower to where they are now. No man was safe. Lila wasn’t exactly pretty earlier... she was quite frightening looking really with her large steel-silver eyes. Her curls were greasy with neglect, her features were small and sharp and yet... every man had seemed to have bowed down to her since the moment they left. Nightshade instantly wondered whether it was Lila’s mind control or simple charm but it definitely wasn’t her looks. Though she was skinny and maybe men liked skinny women.
Nightshade was disrupted from her character assassination as the wagon abruptly stopped, sending the woman sprawling into Allard’s arms. The warrior looked ready to help her up until he remembered his instructions. Lila was the one who took one of her gloved hands to pull her to her feet, yelling to Delano.
‘What the hell have we stopped for, Delano?’
Nightshade snatched her hand back when she was standing again. Allard was the first to jump out of the wagon to see what was happened, followed by Lila. It was dark now, the clouds had gathered in all their glory swirling up into the dark heavens and it was raining.
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Allard ran round to the front of the wagon. Delano was frozen in his seat, his dirty finger still clutched at the leather reins, panic washed over his features. Allard was about to demand an answer when Morana held up a hand to silence him. He glanced over his shoulder to see Lila’s fragile form right behind him with a sickly smile. Nightshade emerged from around the back of the wagon, her expression curious and questioning. Morana spoke quietly.
‘Lila, I need you to survey the area. Delano senses something.’
‘Half-Breeds?’ Lila asked, her face serious for a moment as she closed her silver eyes, briefly.
‘But we aren’t even close to the boundaries!’ Allard snapped, trying to maintain an air of sanity in the company but nobody was listening. Lila’s eyes flickered open again, glancing up at Morana.
‘Half-Breeds.’
‘What clan?’
Lila shook her head slowly, trying to concentrate harder.
‘I couldn’t tell. I think they sensed me and put their mind barriers up.’ Lila smiled at Allard who scowled back. Morana looked irritated till Nightshade spoke up, her voice loud with authority.
‘They’re Dragon Clansmen. Five of them. They aren’t very high rank so I think they are probably scouts rather then warriors. I also doubt they were following us.’ She send a smug smile toward Lila and Lila’s eyes darkened with anger.
‘Very impressive.’ The girl snarled bitterly. Allard clutched the girl’s arm sharply to prevent her from lashing out at Nightshade. She tried to pull away but he kept his grasp. Allard knew how much Lila hated being outdone, especially when her powers were concerned. Nightshade didn’t even flutter an eyelash as Morana demanded they should get back into the wagon and she turned, disappearing back behind the wagon.
‘So what do we do?’ Allard asked Morana without moving, slowly letting go of Lila’s arm so she could move away. She shot him a scowl then went back to the wagon.
‘We’ll take them out.’
‘But they might not be scouting us...’
‘We’ll take them out.’ Morana repeated sharply. ‘They could be a danger. We take them out. That is my final word, Allard.’
Allard bit his tongue and turned away to go back to the wagon.
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Woot! Written by Thievesfire (77 comments posted) 14th June 2008 |
Dun dun dun!! suspense ^^ Again I love Allard But this chapter is definitely very well written, the way Nightshade thinks is interesting. I also sympathize with Allard's character more and more he's pushed around a lot by the other characters and it's a reversal of gender rolls in a lot of ways. Very well done love ^^ Looking forwards to the next part! Spooks XX |
hi Written by Scrawl (80 comments posted) 14th June 2008 |
| I enjoyed it. I liked the honesty of interrupting Nightshade's 'character assassination' rather than just thoughts or something similar; Lila's character is laid open as unpleasant and Allard is, once again, revealed as more than a sword backed by some muscles and nought more and our assessment of Moran as manipulative, single-minded and controlling is emphasised. A bit more is revealed about the structure of the world and the clans and Nightshade's past. I look forward to peeling back the next layer to see what is beneath... |
Written by Goddess (124 comments posted) 14th June 2008 |
Thank you both for your really kind comments Spooks - So glad you still love Allard. I'm really enjoying doing this duel narrative between them. Its great! And I'm so glad you notice that he is always being pushed around Thanks for taking the time to read it! Scrawl - Thank you again for your lovely crit. I'm glad you liked the 'character assassination' bit (though credit must go to D.C. for the actual wording) I'm glad you read my characters so well, makes me feel like I'm doing something well! I look forward to writing the next chapter hopefully tomorrow! Thank you both! Goddess x |
Hello Written by littledom2008 (95 comments posted) 15th June 2008 |
as always this is very well done. I agree with what the others have put and I really like that I can see both Allard and Morana’s point with the problem of the scouts. It enforces the idea you get of the group that she forces her decision on him. Well done Goddess another sparking chapter. D.C
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Greetings Goddess Written by serenity2560 (9 comments posted) 16th June 2008 |
I have just read chapters 1 - 4 of Deadly Nightshade and despite the title sounding like something from a comic book I really enjoyed the story. As a writer you possess not only a great way with words but also a vivid imagination. The duel narrative is executed with skill and in four short extracts you make me care for Nightshade and Allard at the same time as you make me begin to despise Morana, Delano and Lila. Congratulations you have a wonderful read here, if you would like a more detailed critique please feel free to ask as I no longer feel comfortable posting such things. Serenity |
Thank you Written by Goddess (124 comments posted) 16th June 2008 |
Thank you both for your really nice comments on my piece. D.C. - thank you very much. I'm glad that you could see both Morana and Allard's point of view with how to deal with the scouts and I'm happy that I made it clear how much power Morana really does have over Allard. Thanks, G.A. *smiles* Serenity - I'm so pleased to get your comment and I'm so glad you enjoyed my chapters. I'm glad that the duel narrative works out well because I'm always worried that people might get confused with the characters I'm supposed to be with and its a huge compliment that you care for the characters after four chapters! Thank you again for your comments. Goddess x |
Written by 1211kellie (165 comments posted) 16th June 2008 |
Still enjoying this story very much. Keep up the good work Kellie |
Written by Goddess (124 comments posted) 16th June 2008 |
Thanks Kellie! So glad you are still enjoying it. I'm hoping to get the next chapter ready for tonight *smiles* Just want to make sure it's up to the same level as the others. Thanks again Goddess |
Written by Becca2010 (24 comments posted) 17th June 2008 |
Well I think its time to say that I'm hooked.... hehe I love the way the stories written and I love the romantice tension between Allard and Nightshade. (btw I've always been a fan of the comic book titles... even though I don't really think it is ) Good work! I can't wait to read chapter five! Oh! and I loved how Nightshade showed up Lila... so great! |
Hey! Written by Goddess (124 comments posted) 18th June 2008 |
Thanks soooo much! I'm really glad you are enjoying it! Especially what is going on between Nightshade and Allard (you'll like the next chapter for this!!!) and I loved writing the Lila-Nightshade section! *smiles* Glad you liked, Becca. Thank you for your comment! Goddess |
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