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By rilLie
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15 June 2008 |
hi everyone! :'D I hope you enjoy this little piec.e :D
There are moments too ephemeral
to be captured in words,
ineffable and evanescent,
leaving me here.
A pack of cards in a hurricane,
ripples lost in the sea,
the silence imbricates in my mind,
leaving me here.
When there's nothing left to say,
and everything freezes numb,
Won't love have a voice?
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Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 15th June 2008 | A little heavy on the vocabulary for me, but I do like the middle verse a lot.
Phil |
Written by DaleGorder (46 comments posted) 15th June 2008 | ril,
I like the premise of this poem. 
What would happen if you changed the word "pack" of cards...to..."house" of cards? |
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