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By bobc
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15 June 2008 |
Just watching an old silent film.
Silent Movie
Dancing lustful characters,
mouthing but do not speak.
Music fills the void.
Spinning red gold sunset grips
a feeling shadowing a peak,
day to be destroyed.
Chasm walls insult intent,
the rise with sorrow blocked.
Nothing of it shared.
Close to the edge, but feet
would not be shocked,
dispatched, no one cared.
Folded into eyes selected,
gazes rejoice the most
while the muses burned.
Birds that soar purple
in trance held close,
shall not sing returned.
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Written by DaleGorder (46 comments posted) 15th June 2008 | Hello bobc and welcome.  | thanks
Written by bobc (51 comments posted) 15th June 2008 | | Thanks for the wecome DG. Don't know how you found me since I don't appear on the 5 latest, yet those that posted right after me do. |
Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 15th June 2008 | | Hello and welcome. I have to tell you that poetry written with all small letters and in blank verse, although popular perhaps, isn't something I like. However, every one to their own taste, but still a big welcome to GW. | I'm a silent movie fan...
Written by CatGem (33 comments posted) 15th June 2008 | so this really speaks to me. Many nights I have sat mesmerized by the images you conjure here - those films are peepholes into another time.
My favourite line is:
chasm walls insult intent
Thank you for sharing this. | Thanks y'all
Written by bobc (51 comments posted) 15th June 2008 | Blank verse is not my favorite either. Seems to be expected some places.
CatGem, I too, feel the poetic in silent films.
Josie, should I capitalize the first letter in each line? |
Written by Veronica_Milvus (768 comments posted) 16th June 2008 | ... personally I would punctuate the poem with the commas and fullstops that you feel should naturally occur, and then only use a capital letter at the beginning of a new sentence...
I liked this, bobc, and welcome. But what surprised me were the references to colours, when the films were black and white... but you probably have a better imagination than I have!
"chasm walls insult intent" was to me the most baffling line!
regards
Veronica | Colors
Written by bobc (51 comments posted) 16th June 2008 | Thanks for the comment and advice, Veronica. I will use the punctuation.
As far as the color goes, since I have seen these things in real life, it is a case of remembering rather than imagining. Black and white just filled in.
"chasm insults intent" reffers to the shear cliffs of a canyon or ravine blocking escape. | bobc
Written by Brett (1001 comments posted) 16th June 2008 | Welcome - liked some of the imagery you use ( love silent films, myself - and of course some did use hints of colour) - would be interested to know which film inspired this.
When Josie says 'blank verse' I think she means 'free verse'.
Cheers |
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