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By jw2089
15 June 2008

Just an idea I had when I found an article in a magazine.


We are the Converse Generation. There’s stars in our eyes. We are the ones that have been left behind. We are tomorrows world. We spend 20 years in education and they put us on the dayshift. We listen to music that makes our ears bleed. We listen to music that makes us dance. That takes us away. We are inked. We have holes where we’re not supposed to have holes. We are implanted. We are Hollywood. We are culture. We are different. We are clichés. We are fashion. We are gossip. We are awake. We are going to live forever.  We are twenty four hour party people. We are retro. We are desirous of everything. We are lovin’ it. We are weapons of mass destruction. We are your in case of emergency. We are kryptonite. We are the middle children of history. We believe in the power of dreams. We are the ones that got away. We do it to ourselves. We are shameless. We are interrupted.
We are the Tarantino Generation. We are in character. We do not have a cause. We gave ourself over to absolute pleasure.  We will travel to infinity. We’re not there. We deserve the best treatment. We never put up with anything else.  We will take you to the edge. We will take you on a journey through time and space.  We will provide you with an excuse. We could care less.  We though it wouldn’t hurt a lot. We look good on the dancefloor. We are bigger than the sound.We got over it. We will take you to giddy stratospheres. We are all you’ve ever wanted. We are moved by simple twists of fate. We are on the otherside. We are animated.  We will kill this one tonight.  We are the Youth and Beauty Brigade. We burn, burn, burn.
We are the Facebook Generation. Our heartbreaks are entertainment. We are the castaways and cutouts. We want to get away. We crave for home. We are back by demand. We call it what we want.  We are not in single digits anymore.  We are superheroes. We promise, that one day everything will be better for you. We are there when the sun sets and when the sun rises. We feel so symbolic. We are dangerously close to wanting nothing.  We will rock you.  We liked it before you. We create the noise that seems to fascinate you.  We feel so alive. We are screaming at the top of our lungs. We will make you an offer you can’t refuse.   We are your friends. We have thunder in our hearts. We hold our colour.  We are the living dead. We don’t look back.
We are the Harry Potter Generation. We write poetry. We want to be on top. We’ll always be there for you. We need you so much closer. We are lost in translation. We sleep with our eyes open. We shalt always kill. We are the tragedy. We are the heroine. We are the beat that your heart skipped.  We are accidents waiting to happen. We like being a mess. We said romance was dead. We are fabulous. We are off the map. We have your number. We watch too much TV. We could make this work. We will never walk alone. We drink lovers spit. We apply our personality in a paste. We are the word burning in your heart. We are fixed up. We look sharp. We are holding onto our foundations. We are gonna need a bigger boat.
We are that Great Generation. We’ll make poverty history. We are excess. We joined the evolution. We are worth it. We take the easy way out. We choose life. We will tell you the next time we see you. We are Keyser Soze. We notice the stripes. We will not be defeated. We are the best at what we do. We have lost control. We are deluded. We are amplified. We are electric. We took the handles. We are united. We will dance to the radio. We are fuck-ups. We are the bored bench-warmers. We made the decision to live fast and die young. We have got a story to tell. We are not even supposed to be here today. We are colourful. We are monochrome. We have our foot in the door.  We are looking for a way out. We are always gonna be there. We cannot change.
The power of children can amaze.  Nothing will stand in our way.

Reviews

Written by DaleGorder (46 comments posted) 15th June 2008
jw, 
You have some wonderful statements going on in this. Colorful and strong, that's good. 
 
I feel a little like I'm attending a tribute to the word "we' though. For my own taste, I'd prefer it blended together more without using that word so much. maybe try and replace a bunch of the we's by using combinations of other words to make it flow easier? Just an idea :)

Written by Canadian_Bacon (110 comments posted) 15th June 2008
Nice insights, but I found it hard to read "We are" so many times. perhaps you could pick your favourite lines and shorten it, or divide it into 3 separate works, or something. 
 
-Mike

Written by mia_ms_kim (973 comments posted) 15th June 2008
This reads like one of those incomprehensible TV commercial for some high tech electronic gadget, particularly because of the last line.  
 
I guess the idea was to communicate the power of that "incomprehensibility" (if there is such a word), a generation that cannot be "named" or "categorised": no boundaries generation. Sounds almost drugged. I wonder if this describes lostness, rebellion or despair... I thought you could shorten it by about a quarter and be more compact and effective. 
 
It was a thought-provoking read. 
 
Mia 8)

Written by CatGem (33 comments posted) 16th June 2008
Perhaps it's because of my own writing style, but I think the we's make the piece. That's really the point, isn't it? At least on some level -- all these commercial bytes and bits and yet there's something that make "y'all" a "We" -- It's something I've noticed in people in their 20's -- (having spent the last two years in very close proximity to one in particular) "we are the cliches" is very true in many ways and yet he beauty of it is that at the heart of all cliches lies Truth -- usually a Universal Truth -- and that's what I'm hearing here. 
 
I'd like to edit it -- laughs -- but I wouldn't touch the We's... smiles 
 
good work

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