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Weeping Again!
By Katanga
15 June 2008

Hey!

Please don't take me seriously - I'm fine! This is a bit of maudlin tragi-comedy . . .

A virtual pint of whatever-you-fancy goes to the first gentle reviewer who spots the Dylan line . . .

Brett, I owe you a few already!

Cheers!

John X


Weeping Again!

You look at me sometimes
through a frosted stained glass.
I feel your blue eyes probing
my long-forgotten past.

Now only half-remembered
unspoken questions wait
for long worn-out answers.
Should I leave them by your gate?

I look at you sometimes,
shake and weep and shiver.
Is it me you want to see
grimacing in your mirror?

When all is said and all is sung
spare a thought for one
who loved you more than Life itself
and left the world undone.

Reviews

Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 15th June 2008
Have you noticed that you more serious work usually seems to end in your end? That's entirely from memory, so I may have it completely wrong. 
 
Really like the first and last, the middle two seem less intense. I think it's the 'gate' and 'grimacing' bits. 
 
Didn't spot the Dylan - but it must be somewhere in the last? 
 
Phil 
 
Ah, Phil!
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 15th June 2008
Many thanks for this, Phil . . . 
 
My end is my beginning, as ever! 
 
My excuse for weak 'middles' (my paunch included) is that I quite like to ease off on content, meter and rhyme for a bit so that the last stanza hits firmly in the solar plexus! 
 
Ha! Pretentious, Moi? 
 
And , BTW, what's the 'plexus' got to do with the Sun?! 
 
Keep working on the Dylan - we may have to wait for Brett. 
 
Where is he? 
 
I worry . . . 
 
Cheers! 
 
Katie! 
 
XXX
Nice
Written by bobc (51 comments posted) 15th June 2008
Puts the eternity of love out there for the reader. I'm so ashamed of myself, me a Dylan fan, Then agaian, he wrote so much.

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