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By Katanga
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15 June 2008 |
Hey!
Please don't take me seriously - I'm fine! This is a bit of maudlin tragi-comedy . . .
A virtual pint of whatever-you-fancy goes to the first gentle reviewer who spots the Dylan line . . .
Brett, I owe you a few already!
Cheers!
John X
Weeping Again!
You look at me sometimes
through a frosted stained glass.
I feel your blue eyes probing
my long-forgotten past.
Now only half-remembered
unspoken questions wait
for long worn-out answers.
Should I leave them by your gate?
I look at you sometimes,
shake and weep and shiver.
Is it me you want to see
grimacing in your mirror?
When all is said and all is sung
spare a thought for one
who loved you more than Life itself
and left the world undone.
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Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 15th June 2008 | Have you noticed that you more serious work usually seems to end in your end? That's entirely from memory, so I may have it completely wrong. Really like the first and last, the middle two seem less intense. I think it's the 'gate' and 'grimacing' bits. Didn't spot the Dylan - but it must be somewhere in the last? Phil
| Ah, Phil! Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 15th June 2008 | Many thanks for this, Phil . . . My end is my beginning, as ever! My excuse for weak 'middles' (my paunch included) is that I quite like to ease off on content, meter and rhyme for a bit so that the last stanza hits firmly in the solar plexus! Ha! Pretentious, Moi? And , BTW, what's the 'plexus' got to do with the Sun?! Keep working on the Dylan - we may have to wait for Brett. Where is he? I worry . . . Cheers! Katie! XXX | Nice Written by bobc (51 comments posted) 15th June 2008 | | Puts the eternity of love out there for the reader. I'm so ashamed of myself, me a Dylan fan, Then agaian, he wrote so much. |
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