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Poetry
The Struggle of the First Play
By Blade
31 March 2005
The torment of a young actor in his first play. 

My throat is full of burning sensation

As I have taken burden of serious obligation.

I seek answer if it is my true vocation.

But time is over for consideration

While I'm standing before you, hoping for standing ovation.

 

My companion on stage came to his world already.

How I would like to be him now, he feels so steady!

For he does not wonder like me if he is ready,

He just knows the flow of comedies and tragedies

When I am all but dramatic in my suffering.

 

My eyes cannot stand explosion of light.

Do these lamps really have to shine so bright?

Can't the dim and hide me in the shade of night,

So all of you would not see my face is white

From tension and I could finally walk out of your sight?

 

I cannot possibly perform well having no escape from ambience.

I can hear all the vicious voices from audience.

God help me! I grow wild, I lose my patience!

Are you laughing at me? Have you no conscience?

May you try your own theatrical entrance!

 

I draw my last gasp waiting to be shattered

And, funny enough, it doesn't matter

What happens. I feel so strangely contented,

I close my eyes and get myself descended

Into a bow. I do not hear you clapping. I've just done what I intented.

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Written by spiderbaby49 (137 comments posted) 3rd April 2005
I have read this a couple of times now and it definately gets better each time. I decided it had a rap like rhythm and it reads aloud very well in this way. 
 
I like the theme very much as I am involved in amateur dramatics and have seen many actors up there on stage for their first time, shivering in their shoes! 
 
 
spidey

Written by IPFaulkner (83 comments posted) 24th May 2006
The rythm of this is very important and works very well because of that. I'm not sure of a poem that ryhmes quite as much as this but if it didn't I suppose we wouldn't have the rythm I mentioned.  
 
IPF

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