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Opposites to all
By bobc
18 June 2008
All things meet their opposites, as Roses meet the thorn.
Accoladed merriment meets deep resounding scorn.
Vision of a  future bright fades as love light fails;
Bold new lands fade from grasp, lost to windless sails.

Children move into adult, beyond our beck and call;
flesh that quivered in delight shows no love at  all.
Your eyes that brought my soul to find all that's meant to be,
Now don't look my way at all and hide your heart from me.

The sea of life contains all things; beauty, love, and hate;
And opposites confound our steps toward swirling coming fate.
So we flow, on and on, to balance on the edge,
Peering through the prickly bush, so as not to breach the ledge.

Sometimes we fall to doom assured, laid in crimson sight;
Hoping for an opposite to warm our cooling night. 

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Written by CatGem (33 comments posted) 18th June 2008
I'm so envious of your ability to control the words -- I find myself so often at their mercy. 
 
A lovely piece -- thank you for sharing, 
Stephanie

Written by Josie (2844 comments posted) 18th June 2008
This is a lovely flowing piece, but I am not entirely sure that it is about opposites. For example, children moving into adulthood and "beyond our beck and call" - isn't exactly true. They usually need their parents as much, if not more, when they are adults - and the grandchildren too. Perhaps your poem is about moving on in life for nothing stays the same forever. Then the other thing is that thins often change because we want them to do so. Lots to think about in your poem. Well done and welcome to GW.

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