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Poetry
Weakness
By Cream
18 June 2008
Warrior on his knees ...

Lost power, lost strength, tired eyes ...

drowned in sadness ... all alone ...

fighting, bleeding, no one knows ...

silent tears that no one sees ...

screams unheard and swallowed fears ...

nibbling from within ...

nightmares in a starless night ...

*

Hours of weakness ... warrior on his knees ...

he will stand up and fight again ...

but now he sleeps and rests and dreams ...

better days will soon come up ...

his heart is strong, his body weak ...

*

Moonlight's blessing silver stream ...

sun's golden warmth and energy ...

reborn from weakness ... fight goes on!

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Well Written Cream
Written by Flexy5000 (5 comments posted) 18th June 2008
I think this has been well written overall. I particularly like the last sentence in the second stanza "his heart is strong, his body weak" and also how the poem ends with a positive remark. 
 
"reborn from weakness .... fight goes on"  
 
A job well done Cream

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