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His Little Darlings
By rose_xx
18 June 2008

I have never liked giving titles to my haikus. For me, the challenge is in telling the story in a limited number of words, and I think that adding a title is almost cheating. This is just my opinion, of course, but it explains my lack of originality. =] As for the poem itself, it’s just a little something I threw together – I’m attempting to wean myself onto more structured things, so this emerged. The rhyme was not intentional, but I like how it came out. 


Angel standing by -
His little darlings, gently
Learning how to cry.

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Written by Brett (759 comments posted) 18th June 2008
I like this very much. Sorry to sound up my own arse, but technically this is a senryu, not a haiku (haiku are concerned with nature - senryu with human emotion, or the human condition). Prosody's pretentions aside I thought this a very lovely piece. 
Cheers

Written by lovelysarah1984 (81 comments posted) 18th June 2008
That's very moving. I love writing haikus and I never know how to title them so maybe I should take your advice and not! 
 
Thanks for sharing! :)

Written by Brett (759 comments posted) 18th June 2008
I agree that both haiku and senryu should be untitled - though I have been guilty of this in the past. 
 
Cheers

Written by lovelysarah1984 (81 comments posted) 18th June 2008
Thanks Brett, I never knew about senryu. i always assumed that is was just a twist on the haiku to use it to describe other things. Wow You're on a roll tonight! 
 
:grin
titles
Written by fellpony (1603 comments posted) 18th June 2008
are inescapable on the site since you can't post a piece without one. You're both right of course. I suppose you could just post the form name.

Written by rose_xx (3 comments posted) 18th June 2008
Thank you all for your comments. And thank you, Brett - I'm an idiot when it comes to technical terms, but I'll try to remember that. :)

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