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By meadowcroft1964
20 June 2008


I write this for my friends. I alway beleived in  the excistance of a higher power than mankind wheather you choose to call it God  karma or destany. I beleive that everything that happen as a reason throughat times it's hard to find. My friends at G.W. have reasurtanted that veiw. The last few days  some of you may have guessed have not me easy for me I had become lost. My inspiration had died and  only dark thought came so as is useally for me I put them into words to dark to post. feeling really down I start to read somebody elses work and relise there are having a dig at me, reading it at no effect on me at all like all bullies he takes the pet when you won't play his game. What changed my mood and lifted my spirts is the support i received from my friends. I don't kid myself that i'm a poet i wouldn't know a sonnet from a halki which by the way i thought was some kind of leafull weapon then again in the wrong hand it could be so. The out come of this story is that I was able to rewrite the dark poem and this is the result.  O by the way i deliberately have not spell check this' but for anyone concern  i am arranging to attend adult liturance classes wish me luck and thanks    
    



Time take it toll

Destiny takes control

Mind and body

Never my soul I prey

Lord shows me the way

Partners me while I dance

Holds me in his arms

When my time comes

To dance my last dance

 

He teaches me the dance

Allows my emotions to feel

Revelling in the dance to

Hope sweet romance

Adapting my steps

To match every tune

Gaining strength as disease advances

I’ll never let my faith stray

Tears and fears fly away

I rejoin the dance

The Parkinson’s Waltz

 

 


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Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 20th June 2008
Hi, Violet. 
 
Sent you a pm. 
 
Mia ;)

Written by Veronica_Milvus (794 comments posted) 20th June 2008
A very bitter little last line, really packed a punch there, I didn't expect it. I enjoyed this poem, if that is the right word for such a sad theme. 
 
Arrogant reviewers - I've seen a few, and I've only been here six months or so. They usually go away. The rest of us are here to be constructive and to support. I've learned that it's the only way to get the best out of people! 
 
Also wishing you luck with the classes. Great job, Violet.

Written by Phil (7169 comments posted) 20th June 2008
Wishing you luck too. That last line did come as a bit of a shock - and it did have power. As far as other reviewers go - don't let it worry you. Read the ones that are constructive - negative or positive - and ignore the ones where the writer seems incapable of little else but belittling those he/she doesn't understand. I suppose they come in all walks of life - we have (and have had) a fair few here. 
 
Hats off to you, Violet. You have a difficulty and you're confronting it to better yourself. Someone else has a difficulty and throws innuendo around. 
 
You're worth ten of them. 
 
Phil
Well said and
Written by Brett (1113 comments posted) 20th June 2008
written, Violet. Regarding content you have shown yourself braver than any bully, who may have a thick skin, but has a skull to match! For what sort of a man but a coward thinks it clever to dish out such arrogance safely through his computer? 
All the best with the classes, I can't say better than Phil! 
Cheers
Thanks
Written by meadowcroft1964 (121 comments posted) 21st June 2008
Thanks and thanks again that's all I can say this is for everyone
Absolutely!
Written by Katanga (1698 comments posted) 21st June 2008
I cannot say what I feel with better words than Phil and Brett above! 
 
All I can add is the very cliched advice which has helped me in past: 
 
'Try to rise above the situation.' 
 
After all, as we all agree, you're bigger than this person in your soul and spirit, and that's what's important! 
 
Strength to you Violet! 
 
John X

Written by Josie (2945 comments posted) 22nd June 2008
Violet, I also have been on a very dark path , and understand fully how you must feel, but whatever the outcome, I can tell you for certain that God's hand is there for you to take, and the path always becomes sunny round the bend. Read my new poem above. It is for you and for me: "On the Road Alone".

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