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If This Round Table Could Talk
By darkyn
21 June 2008

If This Round Table Could Talk


If this round table could talk
What tales would it tell
Of how a tradition began
With one man and one woman in love
Of heartaches and broken dreams made right


Would it tell of tears shed
Of endless night spent worrying
Or would it speak of the love
That saw a family grow

If this round table could talk
Would it tell of the scars upon its surface
The scratches from a child's fork
Of the blood from countless scraps and cuts
Or of the kissed bumps and bruises

Would it tell of sleepless nights
Or floors walked waiting for the phone to ring
Or a key in the door, of family meetings
Shouts of anger, or hugs and tears of love

If this round table could talk
Would it tell of how it has seen
Generation after generation grow and leave
To yet return year after year
Of crisis met and love shared and taught

Would it tell that more than blood a family makes
It's love and caring and giving
Not just food for the body
But also for the soul.

If this round table could hear
I would tell it that in my kitchen
I'm glad that it now sits
Ready to tell all who enter
Welcome to the family.....

Welcome home.


Reviews

Written by Brett (785 comments posted) 21st June 2008
Enjoyed this very much, a wonderful idea. 
 
I particularly like : 'The scratches from a child's fork' 
 
The sixth stanza feels a little cliched to me, but that's only my opinion. 
Otherwise an excellent piece. 
Cheers

Written by briarcroft (37 comments posted) 21st June 2008
I like this idea a great deal, with the kitchen table as witness to a family's life and loves.  
 
I think you mean "scrapes" in stanza three? 
 
And I'd think of another word in the last stanza other than "welcome" to the family as the last "welcome home" is powerful and needs to stand alone. Maybe "Join together with this family" or something like that. 
 
I will never look at my round kitchen table the same way again! 
 
Emily

Written by mia_ms_kim (1019 comments posted) 21st June 2008
Family history and sagas probably happen around the humble kitchen table more than anywhere else. What a thought.  
 
My favrouite line is "Would it tell of the scars upon its surface". The inevitable stains and marks on the table, some light, some deep, unerasable after years of use seem to capture the joys and aches of the human story in each family. 
 
Left me thinking... 
 
Mia 8)

Written by fellpony (1616 comments posted) 21st June 2008
Saw this when you posted on TIBU. The ideas and general presentation are good, though I can't make up my mind if you mean to write a firmly rhythmic kind of verse as suggested by the inversions you use (more than blood a family makes; in my kitchen I'm glad that it now sits) or whether it is meant to be free and more like speech (in which case, maybe the inversions ought to go?). 
 
It works, but I think it would gain in power by losing uncertainty, if you addressed that point.

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