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This World is Screwed!
By Cream
22 June 2008
... entirely!!!

This world is ruled by might and cash,

by beauty and by sex (it sells!).

A photographers camera flash

decides who's in or out (or smells!).

And all the others are not worth.

 

Corruption scores the world of law,

fairness is an unknown word (who cares?).

The poor are hit by lawyers saw,

begging wouldn't help on that (nor prayers!).

Poor people are not worth.

 

Cheats on votings, threads and kills,

sad thing that it does work (that way!).

The winner is who finally thrills

and knows to pull the strings (and play!).

All the fair ones are not worth.

 

The fingers full of lubricate,

the heads are filled with greed (and coke!),

they even cheat the line of fate,

they will always beat the top (or stroke!).

Honesty is just not worth.

 

World, where will this lead us to?

Is there solution (or just hope)?

This politicians freak show zoo

went bothering (like daily soap!).

We know that there IS something worth!

Reviews

Written by KaydieKate (63 comments posted) 23rd June 2008
Odd rhyming, but entertaining. There are some clunky words, but over all I like it!

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 24th June 2008
Not a fan I'm afraid. I've read so many doom and gloom poems along this line, but none of them seem to offer any proof that this age is worse than any other. They also neglect all the positive aspects of today's world.  
The rhyme scheme is indeed clunky, and you might want to ask yourself what the brackets and exclamation marks add to the work.

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