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Why did you walk away?

By LynB

22 June 2008

I posted up this poem once before on GW, some of you may remember it. I've altered one of the verses slightly. I am just so bloody angry at the moment - so much is happening, that I don't know whether I'm coming or going. Getting my feelings out on paper sometimes helps - hope you don't mind.

Where are you now, dad?
Why did you have to go at all?
So many things I want to know
Now I’m older, so strong and tall

Why can’t you be here, dad?
Can’t you love me, like other dads do?
I see my mates, so proud of their dads
I wish I could be proud of you

Why did you leave me, dad?
I guess I'll never know now
I want so much to be a man like you
But there's no one to show me how

Will you ever come back, dad?
Maybe when it’s all over and done
When it’s too late, you’ll stop and think
And remember you had a son.

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Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 22nd June 2008

I hope your son copes as best his can. I'm sure you are there for him and that he knows that. I don't understand how a father can abandon his child - at any age. When your son matures, it'll be his father who regrets it.

It's always very hard as a parent not being able to influence our children's lives for the better. It seems this one is out of your hands.

Hope I've not over stepped the mark. Personal pieces are hard to comment on.

Best wishes.

Phil

Written by Josie (2732 comments posted) 23rd June 2008

A little girl has adopted me as her "granny" because her father and, of course, his mother, left her life one day and never came back. She has never got over it. She asks me: "Do you think they ever think of me?" and tells me how she cries on father's day. It is one of the worst things that can happen to children and I would say far worse than a father dying, for these little ones have these questions going through their brain all the time. They feel abandoned when they most need their fathers. No woman could agree that this can be right. You really need to get the Stephen Fry book which we have been working on: "The Ode Less Travelled" or come to my website where I am trying to help children with metre. This is what is letting your poem down I'm afraid.

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 24th June 2008

Not a fan I'm afraid- this poem is so general it could be written by anyone who grew up without a father. I feel like it needs some personal touches, something to let the reader see from the eyes of the poet.

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