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By Robru
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25 June 2008 |
This is from experience not my own, but gleaned from other sources.
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I went to your father and asked for your hand
Your Dad said just take her, but please understand
She can't cook your food, and she won't wash your floor
So I spun on my heel and made for the door;
Bye now - its been nice to meet you
Bye now - its been nice to greet you
But quite a while since I've been home
And I better be getting along.
Well, I was at home having a ball
From outside my door I heard a voice call
The family was there, so was the gun
"You'll marry my daughter, I'll call you son"
Hi now - its been nice to meet you
Hi, now - its been nice to greet you
You'll soon be making a family home
So we better get moving along.
The chapel was full from the front to the back
The best man was holding a gun in my back
All of my friends tried to kiss the new bride
But I rushed her right past when we went outside
Bye now - its been nice to meet you
Bye now - its been nice to greet you
Its time to show my new wife her home
So we better get moving along.
Now we were happy for quite a few years
Four children she gave me - cute little dears
But the Lord in his wisdom was kind to me not
Our love died away and love was forgot.
Now that she's has left me; I still wonder why;
But I hear the words she said as goodbye.
Bye now - its been good to know you
Bye now - its time to show you
Now's the right time to make my own home
So I better be moving along.
The kids stayed with me for two or three years
Then came the peak of all of my fears
They went the way that all children do
They left me to start their own lives anew.
Bye now - its been good to know you
Bye now - we just have to show you
We are quite ready to make our own homes
So we better be moving along.
Now I'm alone with no one to care
There's no one at home to welcome me there
There's no one I know with affection to give
Will I be lonely as long as I live?
Bye now - its been good to know you
Bye now - it just goes to show you
Love everlasting is just a pipe dream
So I better be moving along.
I took to drinking to ease all my pain,
But I felt much worse when I sobered again.
Will I be unhappy,sarcastic and mean?
Will I find love and be merry and keen?
Or will I get drunk again and again.
Will someone please help me to ease all that pain.
Bye now - its been good to meet you
Bye now - its been good to greet you
Its a long long time since I had a home
But I gotta be moving along.
© Copyright 2008 Bob -
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Excellent!
Written by Katanga (1182 comments posted) 25th June 2008 | This so good, Bob! I've read it again and again.
I simply love this kind of narrative verse, and your use of repetition makes this especially powerful and chilling!
More please!
Cheers!
John |
Written by mia_ms_kim (997 comments posted) 25th June 2008 | Enjoyed this - if it's the right word for it. A sad subject written with dry humour and a comical touch. It takes the bite out while leaving the reader with lingering sadness since most can relate to the human story. It probably made the piece more effective, particularly the last 2 stanzas. I wondered what the last stanza meant.
Mia  | Mia - Last Stanza!
Written by Katanga (1182 comments posted) 25th June 2008 | Hello again Mia!
I can't speak for Bob, but my own interpretation of the last stanza is as follows:
The poet is finally addressing us i.e. you and me, saying he is a down-and-out homeless alcoholic - he's saying 'Hi!' and 'Goodbye!' at the same time, echoing the same thing from previous stanzas.
Brilliant, I think!
Hey, Bob! Is this right?
We need you on this!
Yo!
John X |
Written by mia_ms_kim (997 comments posted) 25th June 2008 | That makes a lot of sense, John. Spelled out like that, it's heartbreaking. I'd wondered what kind of 'bye' it was. If the subject is a homeless man, then I guess he could be wandering off to else where after telling his story. If not, then was it 'bye world'? A sadder interpretation was on my mind.
Mia | Yes Mia!
Written by Katanga (1182 comments posted) 25th June 2008 | Gosh, I hadn't gone as far as you . . .
Whichever way one reads it - sad as Hell, and very moving.
And then one day the angels came . . .
Cheers!
John X |
Written by Robru (212 comments posted) 27th June 2008 | In answer to you both. The man is question is now a homeless drunkard and is pleading to you, the reader, to help him get back his self respect and dignity. In real life he made it. Thank you for your comments and compliments. I feel that my writing is getting a little better. Over the past year or so i have come from nothing written to trying to get a book of poetry together. Special thanks to all those who have given me reasonable criticism since I began to write again.
Best wishes to you all.
Bob |
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