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Poetry
Love
By awakenedmind
25 June 2008
To my wife

I want to live not to die

I want to see the morning sky

To hear the birds and smell the air

To be part of the big wide world out there



When it rains or when it snows

Or when a gale does blow

It doesn’t matter to me you see

For its nature that’s calling me



Nature and life mean a lot to me

Especially with you standing next to me

Together a bond of love everlasting

My love and yours is never fasting



The warmth of the sun

The cool of the breeze

The warmth of your love

That caresses me



To love is nature’s way

To make a bond forever stay

Two people joined as one

Makes a family bind with fun

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Written by PinothyJ (6 comments posted) 25th June 2008
Try to avoid same word rhymes where possible. The rhythm in stanza two is rather awkward I found. The second last stanze I was really warming (:P) until the third line. If you're stuck for words try using a reverse dictionary or a thesaurus to really give you a new look on things. Although, with a poem name like 'Love' I'm surprised you've kept away from so many cliché, well mostly. 
 
 
It's a sweet little poem nevertheless…

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