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By Chinaski
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25 June 2008 |
The winding, cobbled
streets
somewhat confusing
but also very
fascinating
walking is the way
wandering, alone
chasing the essence
of a place
the people
the shops
paint peeling from the
buildings
drunken fights in
the street
the smell of sea air
kids in pubgardens
playing
while their fathers
sip a cold one
drops of water like a snake down the glass
while they sit,
stare and
contemplate
the happy, the
successful
and the worn down
all somehow beaten
It’s all there to
see
the truth on display
it catches the heart
like a cat catches a
mouse
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Written by strangeloop (10 comments posted) 26th June 2008 | | I like this, yet the line "like a cat catches a mouse" was a bit of a cliche I thought. I would like to see a unique simile here to end the poem with a punch. just my opinion though. |
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