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By briarcroft
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26 June 2008 |
A poem written after my usual morning walk to fetch the newspaper
Midwinter mornings
Waking dark to part
From your warm side,
Leaving behind my soft imprint,
I wrap up in robe
To walk the gravel drive
For the newspaper
Our hilltop farm
Lies silent amid fallow fields
Moon shadows
Broad across my path
Star sparks overhead
Tree lined yard shields
The house from road.
In ink of early morning
I walk noiseless;
Step out to the mailbox
Then turn~ startled~
A flashlight
Approaching on the road-
An early walker and his dog
Illuminate me in dawn disarray
Like a deer in headlights:
My ruffled hair, my sleep lined face
Vulnerability suddenly
Uncovered in the darkness;
Exposed.
Now summer morning
Wakes me early to streaming light
Poured out on quilt and blankets.
I part from your warmth again
Readied for ritual walk.
Dew sparkling below
Rich foliage above
Road stretches empty
For miles east and west
Crossing to the mailbox
I reach for the paper
Suddenly surrounded by
A cud chewing bovine audience
Appreciative and nodding
Riveted by my bold approach
In broad daylight.
Yet abruptly scatter, tails in the air
When in rumpled robe and woolen slippers
I dance and twirl
In hilltop celebration
Of ordinary life and extraordinary love
Exposed.
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Written by Josie (2825 comments posted) 26th June 2008 | | What two different, but interesting, pictures you paint at the start of day. Very nice. (woollen) | Written by briarcroft (38 comments posted) 26th June 2008 | Thank you Josie, interesting point about the spelling of woolen/woollen ---there are some dilemmas in the Americanized (perhaps bastardized?) spellings vs the classic British spellings. I will try to watch that more closely. Emily | Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 29th June 2008 | | A good piece of picture-painting done nice and simply. I like the sense of the peaceful early-morning you create. Some lines seem to be missing words though ("I wrap up in robe", "Readied for ritual walk"), I feel like the fluidity of the piece could be improved if you added them. |
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