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Western Philosophy #1

By Mr_E_Writer

26 June 2008

          We had a long distance love affair;
          Albeit short lived.
          Now I wear bifocals.

                       *

          I loved you madly
          'til you joined the local gym.
          You wear out trainers.

                       *

          We fell in love on the 9:15 from Paddington
          Our relationship went off the rails.
          Now I ride a bicycle.

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Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 26th June 2008

Not as good as #2, but I like what you're doing with these, especially the totally superflous title. Is the 'but' needed?

Written by Phil (6851 comments posted) 26th June 2008

Liked this too. Raised a smile. Agree with Nathan about the 'but.' Without it lends it a more 'ah, Grass Hopper' feel.

Phil

Written by Brett (889 comments posted) 26th June 2008

Liked this. No buts seems to be the verdict!
Cheers

Written by Mr_E_Writer (192 comments posted) 27th June 2008

Thanks, chaps.

As my local newsagent often says: But-but-but.
It's gone.

Thanks,
Eric.

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