Another True Story. I guess I was about eleven.
JANSON STREET
The terrace straggled down the slope;
its blackened bricks and sooty air
cried poverty and slender hope,
but my friend Karen’s house was there.
Cobblestones beneath our feet
as we skipped ropes on Janson Street.
No central heating, outside loo,
an old tin bath beside the fire,
pervasive damp, and wet mildew;
Karen’s family’s house was dire.
She’d bathe at our house, for a treat;
the refugee from Janson Street.
On Friday nights I’d stay to sleep;
her folks went out for booze and fags,
while Karen to their room would creep
to find their stash of dirty mags.
We’d read them underneath the sheets,
I learned some things, in Janson Street.
When Karen’s dad complained of pain
his doctor thought him “on the skive”.
He never went to work again;
a heart attack at thirty-five
made his life short – but never sweet.
There’s funeral cars down Janson Street.
Her Mum went drinking, even more,
presumably with other friends;
had more cash, somehow, than before,
and on us kids she’d freely spend.
With lemonade and crisps replete,
outside the pub on Janson Street.
One afternoon, in double History
Kaz said her Mum was up the duff;
the baby’s father was a mystery.
My parents couldn’t take this stuff,
no longer keen for me to meet
the common whore of Janson Street!
A vacant house came up, just then
on the council’s new estate.
I never saw my friend again
or learned much of her family’s fate.
No more excuse for us to meet,
since they moved out of Janson Street.
A slum of urban deprivation
condemned, and all the windows boarded;
“unfit for human habitation”.
The people moved somewhere less sordid.
Demolition was complete,
the end of squalid Janson Street.
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Sings Written by patterjack (1179 comments posted) 27th June 2008 | Somehow this reminds me of the sort of material I read years ago--probably before you were born ! And so , if only for sheer nostalgia value - I thoroughly enjoyed it . Yet let us not forget -- your metrical and rhyming skills are outstandingly good ! All in all , great effort ! patterjack | Written by Phil (6688 comments posted) 27th June 2008 | For me, there's always something special about a reported history put to verse or prose. It adds a certain validity and value to the piece even before it's read. I'm a sucker for narrative verse - so the narrative aspects of this appealed straight away. The echoes of 'Janson Street' worked really well. I've no idea of your age (especially relative to mine (41) but this had a real 1970s (late) feel to it. Really like this. Phil | Written by Brett (759 comments posted) 27th June 2008 | Like Phil, I find reported history, particularly in verse, almost tangible, and the repitition of 'Janon Street' at the end of each stanza reaffirms this for me. Enjoyed this very much, V - and I wouldn't dream of alluding to a lady's age! Cheers | Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 27th June 2008 | Agree with what's been said- a well-crafted piece. Especially liked the little details and the gradual development of the narrative. The rhyme seems a tad forced in places ("On Friday nights I'd stay to sleep), but I'm not a big fan of rhyme so it's probably just me. | Written by mia_ms_kim (997 comments posted) 27th June 2008 | I love reading your autobiographical pieces. This one is a little piece of history, yours, your friend's, families differentiated by socioeconomic classes, and the particular street. The line 'unfit for human habitation' made me ver sad - it seems to sum up the disadvantaged class of people. Mia | Complete Written by bobc (50 comments posted) 27th June 2008 | | The narrative nature was completed well, nothing left for the reader to mistake. I think I agree, SEEMS like a snapshot of a change. Not too emotinal for believing it to be real. | Written by Lizzy (790 comments posted) 27th June 2008 | This describes so well the area where I was born and brought up (not that my family were like the one described). I won't call it 'the good old days' but one thing about it was everyone knew everyone, good and bad, if only I could remember some of the stories, and gossip, and write about them. You've made a good job of this bit of history in your poem Veronica. Lizzy | Written by Veronica_Milvus (603 comments posted) 28th June 2008 | Thanks all for your reviews. Phil - I think this must have been about 1974/5. I'm four years or so ahead of you. GK - I had real trouble with that stanza and I agree that line does sound forced, I failed to come up with anything better. Come to think of it, what were they doing, leaving a couple of eleven year olds (and Karen's younger brother) alone in the house? Mia - thanks. "unfit for human habitation" was exactly what was on the notices pasted on the boarded-up windows. For all I've said about them, the family were nice people, kind, loving, I enjoyed their company, and missed my friend a lot when I was forbidden to see her again. It seems amazing to me that houses like that were still in evidence in the seventies. I guess it took Britain a long time to recover from WWII. The strange thing about that street was that it existed as an enclave in a nice neighbourhood of respectable "semi-detached". It's long gone now, thankfully. The big, solid council house with the bathroom must have seemed like heaven to those kids. | Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 29th June 2008 | | I think even a little change like "On Friday nights I'd sometimes sleep" makes it a bit more fluid. Hope that helps. |
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