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Forgiven, forgotten
By Fledermaus
27 June 2008
Googled my old love... Strange how little it does me now, almost as if it has never happened...

Your name did change.

You wear a ring.

Isn't it strange?

I feel nothing.

 

There's no regret,

No jealousy,

Nothing of that.

How could that be?

 

I look at you,

And know they're right,

Whatever you do,

Your looks in spite.

 

You're a stranger...

Reviews

Written by mia_ms_kim (1054 comments posted) 27th June 2008
I feel your "strange feelings" that an ex can become such a stranger to you, as if the relationship happened to another person??? It seems strange, but maybe you have changed, too, and are not the same person you were??? Perhaps the distance comes from your change as well as hers? It's an intriguing thought. 
 
I've heard of couples separated by war for decades, married to other people, then after being widowed finding each other again. I found that strange, too. 
 
Third stanza was puzzling. Are you saying "they" - your friends perhaps, had assessed her correctly, that she is spiteful? Or she looks good in spite of everything? 
 
Mia :roll
The movement is so quick
Written by bobc (50 comments posted) 27th June 2008
The flow of change is fast sometimes. And the healing or realization can be too, if we are fortunate. This fast pace was what I felt when reading this. 
 
And the proverbial "they" seem to be ever present in one way or another don't THEY?

Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 27th June 2008
Thanks Mia and bobc. 
It's a strange thing, that someone you cried over seems to be so irrelevant a few years later...

Written by Robru (249 comments posted) 28th June 2008
 
The first stanza says it all for me. Your name did change 
You wear a ring. 
Isn't it strange? 
I feel nothing. 
Those four lines mean that you are a lucky person. Its over so lets get on with life. Not Easy. Nicely written.

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3434 comments posted) 28th June 2008
Interesting, thought provoking and simply expressed. Yes it is strange but it must be some sort of safety cut-off otherwise we would all be emotional wrecks. And there can only be two outcomes to any relationship, failure or death and you can't recover from death. 
jane

Written by Phil (6832 comments posted) 28th June 2008
Yes, interesting concept - expressed pretty well. I'm not sure exflames become irrelevant as strangers. As I've got older, relationships from the past become fond(ish) memories - and their players, old friends. 
 
Phil

Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 28th June 2008
Thanks Robru, Jane and Phil. 
It surprised me, for it took me a lot of time to get over her and when I visited her website I half thought:" Am I being stupid, making it all come back?", but it could just as well have been someone else's site... I doubt if it'd even make an impression if I'd meet her in real life.
Interesting
Written by Alexis.G (19 comments posted) 2nd August 2008
Very interesting, and I can certainly identify with what you're saying, although on a far smaller scale I suppose. To top it off, it was very well written. 
 
Thankyou so much for your review for my piece "Passion versus Apathy" and your kind comments despite the fact that reading over it again, it suffers as a written piece rather than a verbal one. I especially enjoyed your comparison between government employees and Stormtroopers from Star Wars. 

Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 3rd August 2008
Thanks Alexis :-)
Hi Ron
Written by jean.day (2323 comments posted) 4th August 2008
When you are really over it, you will stop wanting to goole her name. I still, maybe once a year, goole the name of my first boyfriend - just to make sure he is still alive. But if he moved next door - I couldn't guarantee I wouldn't still be interested.

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