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Sad-eyed Lady
By Katanga
28 June 2008

The title is a nod to Bob Dylan and his masterpiece 'Sad-eyed Lady of the Lowlands'.

A bit of whimsical melancholy . . .

Comments more than welcome!

Cheers!

John X


Sad-eyed Lady

You look at me with sad brown eyes,
pain lingers in your smile.
I see a hurt that hunts you down –
let’s sit and talk a while

of things that we can’t dream of now,
of what is yet to come,
of wistful vain impossibles
and all our loves undone.

You tell me all that’s gone before,
yet you don’t need to go
through all of those dark empty nights,
for I already know

from what your eyes reflect to me
a hollow deep within,
a melancholy memory
of death as black as sin

You look at me with sad brown eyes.
What have we got to gain
except a broken future life
of grief and growing pain?

So turn your eyes away from me
and save ourselves the time
it takes to reach the point at which
what’s yours is also mine.

We’re lost in conversation now
about God knows what all –
creation and the universe –
we’re heading for the fall.

Look at me with your sad brown eyes –
I won’t ask you to choose
a road to certain disaster where
there’s nothing left to lose.

Reviews
The road
Written by bobc (50 comments posted) 28th June 2008
"AND THE ROAD GOES ON FOREVER"

Written by Phil (6685 comments posted) 28th June 2008
You mention Bob Dylan in the intro - which I read after the piece. Apt, because this read like song lyrics for me. No idea what the difference is technically - but certainly in tone - this needs singing. 
 
Do you play? 
 
Phil
Ah Phil!
Written by Katanga (1182 comments posted) 28th June 2008
I think you've got me sussed - yes, I twiddle and strum on the old guitar . . .  
 
You may have noticed a nod at Fleetwood Mac above? 
 
'Brown Eyes', sung by Christine McVie on 'the album 'Tusk'. That lyric starts ; 
 
'You look at me with those brown eyes 
What do you want to say?' 
 
Phwoooooargh! I borrowed the idea. 
 
For me, 'Sara' by Stevie Nicks, is the ultimate, but that's another story . . . 
 
I assume you play also?! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John X 
 

Written by Phil (6685 comments posted) 29th June 2008
I did. But my guitar was broken about two years ago and I can't afford another. Roll on my best seller eh? 
 
Phil
Best Seller?
Written by Katanga (1182 comments posted) 29th June 2008
Cor! Are you writing one Phil? 
 
I think we should be told! 
 
For what it's worth, as you know, I'm 15,000 words into my first novel about my penis . . . 
 
Now, should I have put a comma after 'novel', or am I writing a trilogy about my person? 
 
Waaaaaaah! 
 
John X

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