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By Brett
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30 June 2008 |
Another rare venture into the Kids section. The fish swims happily in the river,
When it rains he never shivers;
When the April showers fall
The fish won't sneeze, desire a shawl.
What need he to fuss or fret?
As a fish he's always wet! |
Lovely!
Written by Katanga (1179 comments posted) 30th June 2008 | Nice one, Brett!
Reminds me of an Ezra Pound (I think) quote:
"And the fish that swim in the sea do not even own clothing.'
His, and yours, I guess are bemoaning the human condition of constantly fussing and fretting.
Cheers!
John | nice!
Written by prodigy (22 comments posted) 30th June 2008 | 
hey you could get this published or something it's a lovely idea! |
Written by mia_ms_kim (993 comments posted) 2nd July 2008 | Nathan (5) liked this poem. I had to explain to him some of the words eg, desire, shawl etc. He found the idea of fish sneezing (or not) funny. And the idea of a wetness on a fish was novel.
Mia  | Mia, I'm glad
Written by Brett (757 comments posted) 3rd July 2008 | your Nathan enjoyed this. Regards having to explain some of the words (though writing for children is certainly no forte, or even passtime, of mine) I don't believe that if children are introduced to as much language as possible (I know how that reads - I don't mean by my taking them to my local), I mean the diversity of the language, the more they will appreciate it and its subtlties.
Tolstoy - yes, that was my point - thanks.
prodigy - thanks, but that's not my intention for these poems.
Cheers |
Written by Josie (2772 comments posted) 14th July 2008 | | Brett, I liked this simple little poem, and I am sure that children will love it too. The idea of a fish in a shawl? I could see a picture of this at the top of your poem. ha ha | Query, Brett!
Written by Katanga (1179 comments posted) 15th July 2008 | In your comment above, second line, I presume you mean 'I do believe . . . ' rather than 'I don't believe . . .'?
Makes for an interesting discussion, I think.
Anyway, thoroughly enjoyed reading this again!
Cheers!
John |
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