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By Talisker
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30 June 2008 |
Aeroplanes make distance much too easy
Time is cheated, somehow false, unique to each
A drowning man is tossed upon the ocean
Now a wave from death, a lifetime from the beach
Whilst to a baby’s wide-eyed, spellbound gaze
The Moon is equidistant with the toy
Hung alluringly, yet just beyond his reach
Oli 30/06/08
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Written by patterjack (1196 comments posted) 30th June 2008 | | to continue
Written by patterjack (1196 comments posted) 30th June 2008 | I meant to begin with Ah , yes -- The Moon and Sixpence
but that errant finger got in the way
Interesting concept -- and not to be given the finger !!!
patterjack |
Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 30th June 2008 | I liked the opening line and the final three which concentrate your idea on specific images.
I'm not sure about the second line, or what exactly you're trying to say about time. Time is 'cheated' because distances are compressed by modern, globalising technology, such as the aeroplane? But, wouldn't this make time less relative, less unique - as we all begin to operate to a compressed, uniform, global time?
I'm probably being too analytical about it, but I feel that opening line is interesting and I'd like to know more about what it means - what is wrong with distance being 'easy'? Is it because it demystifies the world? Makes it less personal? This would probably tie in with the images of the baby - spellbound, mystified by the toy and the moon. | Thanks Brian & Nathan
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 30th June 2008 | All personal perspective Nathan I suppose.
The first line was inspired by a lyric from a song. Don't you feel that time is different to you when you fly a long distance. We even cross time lines. But those we are flying over have a different experience of the "same" time. Each person experiences time uniquely is what I was getting at. It is not as absolute as we treat it, with atomic clocks and such like. It was a poem by Josie that brought the notion up.
Yes, the supersonic age does take some of the mystery from time and travel. Shortly I travel to the Isle of Tiree in the outer Hebrides, not flying, but by a car journey and then a ferry. In distance it is only a few hundred miles, in time it is more distant than Hong Kong.
I think you had the jist anyway!
Cheers
Oli
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Written by Phil (6731 comments posted) 30th June 2008 | Speculative (it seems) in thought. The arresting image for me was in lines 3 and 4. Not really relative to time, but with the title - distance. One and the same?
Your normal work usually seems more sure of itself - but I like this slightly tentative piece.
Does all that make sense?
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Written by Robru (219 comments posted) 1st July 2008 | Time and distance are relative to each other. My partner says there iwas no such thing as time until humans invented it. Space travel,I'm told, won't happen until man can bend space. If that is possible then where is time? From the Earth to pluto in 15 minutes. The mind boggles. I think this is a well written piece.
Does all that make sense or am I waffling a bit ?
Cheers.
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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 1st July 2008 | A very thought provoking piece. I partly agree with it and part of me doesn't and I'm trying to work out why.
Along with your last poem I think I detect some Luddite tendencies on your part. I can sympathise as I find some modern technology a bit relentlessly self-fulfilling as if it was an end in itself. I do worry that my understanding of the computer I'm in front of is just about equal to that baby's understanding of his mobile.
Anyway a beautifully written piece.
jane |
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