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Seventeen Reasons
By NathanRoberts
30 June 2008
First draft.  May need tweaking, or major surgery.



Because:

I wish to register a complaint with God.
My dreams keep fading.  No-one

quite grasps it.  Everything and everybody
is a cliché, until you move

words around.
There is a direct conduit between

wit and the nipple. 
I need to release

what's underneath.  Salsa dancing
horrifies me.

My funeral will be poorly attended. 
It's a low cost venture.

There can be only two reasons why we are here:
grow wiser, be creative.  Sometimes

there's a buzz.
I am entering a tunnel beneath my head.

I feel less guilty when I do.
The next step forward

is re-mystification. You can't improve
on the blank canvas

and
even weasel words need a home.

But, do you want to know the main reason I write poetry?

It's the final resting place,
where a full stop sings.

Reviews

Written by Phil (6683 comments posted) 30th June 2008
I like it - but not for the first time I'm mystified with some of the line/verse breaks. Not a crit, just an honest admission. Your choice - but I'd be interested to know the reason/s. 
 
Phil

Written by Robru (212 comments posted) 30th June 2008
I like it too. Very much so, in fact. Like Phil I am somewhat mystified why the line breaks. The last two lines are just great.

Written by mia_ms_kim (997 comments posted) 1st July 2008
I'm beginning to think you are making a statement by the almost random structure of your poem as well as its content. Starting the poem with "Because:" and providing the question towards the end. Deliberate break in the mid-sentence. 17 reasons (random number?) and mostly random answers. Starting the first reason with notifying God of your complaint etc. It's as if you are saying with the body of the poem that there is no order to life, no sensible answer, it's random, an enigma???  
 
I find it as follows: 
 
Sad and cynical.  
"You can't improve / on the blank canvas" 
 
Honest and vulnerable. 
"There can be only two reasons why we are here: 
grow wiser, be creative." 
 
"But, do you want to know the main reason I write poetry?  
 
It's the final resting place,  
where a full stop sings." 
 
Maybe what you do know for sure, is the final reason you provide??? Your search to ask the right question and to answer them, is the only thing that makes sense? Anyway, that's how I seem to be reading it. 
 
You seem to be in a particular mode / mood. Hmmm... 
 
Mia 8)
Thanks all
Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 1st July 2008
Though i say it's a first draft I had experimented with several different line breaks/stanza formations until I landed with the one that felt intuitively 'right'. When you're writing in free verse there are, of course, an infinite array of choices as to how you arrange the lines. In the end, you have to choose intuitively, I think.  
 
It's essentially another list poem, but the aim was to arrange the reasons in such a way that they blended into something more than just random, seperate statements.  
To get crossover, blurring of meaning, multiple meaning, layers. 
 
Mia: again I really love your interpretation. This is what it's all about. There can't be one single 'correct' meaning to a poem that was placed there by the author.  
 
 
 
 
 

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