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Castles made of sand
By bobc
02 July 2008

Life's a beach


I hear the washing trumpet before I see it's tongue

As this ritual plays out as it has since earth was young
Eyes of forever have gazed on curling liquid might
And sought with same humility to enter in the fight
The beating of it's breast of power rumbles in the soul
Drops of foaming eternity spit and take their toll

The walls of my desire rise thick to meet the rage
As if to write a different story on the ancient page
The battle starts with duty felt from places deep within
With the weapons I possess, the struggle can begin
I pick a promising place to make my heartfelt stand
Then dig my mind and fingers in the warm inviting sand

I don't know why I choose to build my castles here
I only know this losing fight is something I don't fear
The effort will be smoothed, soon no trace remains
Yet I know I'll return to sculpt the eternal grains
New walls I'll build in a vain attempt to vanquish time
Knowing just the joy of play is all that will be mine

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Written by Talisker (1338 comments posted) 2nd July 2008
Time to get out the bucket and spade again. 
 
You had me misty eyed with this one. It must be, oh, weeks since I last built a sand castle. 
 
I thought this might be a nod to Hendrix, but no - a nice childish reverie. 
 
Oli :)
He was in my thougts
Written by bobc (51 comments posted) 2nd July 2008
"Just ask the Axis". Sand is such an easy vehicle for metaphor.
Or Oli
Written by Brett (1113 comments posted) 2nd July 2008
a nice Voodoo Chile reverie! 
Bless ol' Jimi. 
Cheers

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