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Written by fellpony
02 July 2008
A 20 minute sonnet ... Macchiavellian? Torquemadan? I don't think so.

a Seeking a form consistent with my themes,
b I found the Petrarch sonnet in a book,
b And studied how the patterned lines might look
a Should I translate my thoughts into graphemes.

a The trick is to collect your words, it seems,
b And pair them by the spoken sounds, and hook
b Ideas upon the sounds. I undertook
a To try this Macchiavelli of rhyme-schemes.


c The problem isn’t rhyming, I have found –
d The dictionary gives me rhymes, and more
e Suggests wild new connections to my mind
c That lift my stumbling feet above the ground –
d But metrical constraints, to which before
e I’d never ever found my feet confined.

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Well said
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 2nd July 2008
Neat verse summary of the problems of the form-- though I myself  
have never found any one sonnet form more difficult than any other  
 
patterjack
true
Written by fellpony (1821 comments posted) 2nd July 2008
And I have also used poetic licence when remarking on the difficulty of managing metre, something I seldom have trouble with in actual fact!
In my recent crappy effort...
Written by Talisker (1338 comments posted) 2nd July 2008
I stuck to cdcddd a bit easier I think - and I borrowed it from one of Billy Waggadagger's efforts! 
 
Interesting, Sue. 
 
Oli 
 
:)
I think, Oli,
Written by fellpony (1821 comments posted) 2nd July 2008
you mean cdcd ee - which is always a neat end to a sonnet, like striking the final blow to a nail! WS liked to do that, didn't he.
I guess so...
Written by Talisker (1338 comments posted) 2nd July 2008
except my e happpened to be the same as my d! 
 
All good fun, and yes the BofA was the fellow for a witty coup de grace! 
 
Oli :)

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3713 comments posted) 2nd July 2008
Well I wasn't expecting the Spanish Inquisition- hah! 
I was going to comment on this but after reading the others I realise I would only show myself up 
It was very clever,though 
jane

Written by Phil (7169 comments posted) 2nd July 2008
Yep, clever stuff. Probably too clever for me to say anything intelligent! 
 
(I always find metre difficult) 
 
Phil 
 

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