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Folk Song Blues
By Veronica_Milvus
03 July 2008
This is for a couple with different musical tastes.  I have tried to create a fusion genre to suit them both.  And thanks to Oli Talisker for inspiring me to get it written.

FOLK SONG BLUES

Well since my baby left me

such a lonesome man I’ve been,

‘til I walked out one May morning

among the hedgerows green.

Twas there I spied a fair maid,

silver buckles on her shoes,

I asked her if she’d walk with me

and take away my blues.

 

I’ve got those English folk revival

Cecil Sharp vernacular survival blues.

 

She sang me such sweet lyrics fair

about a bold Dragoon;

so I pulled out my slide, right there

and laid down a twelve bar tune.

I took her to the crossroads

where once I’d sold my soul.

She kissed me on both cheek and chin;

her maidenhead I stole.

 

I’ve got those wave your hankies in the air

and morris dance around the town square blues.

 

I’m a dirty lowdown cowboy

with rambling on my mind

I begged her on my bended knee

to treat this poor boy kind.

So before the sun had set, me boys

and I’d picked up my clothes

I’d improvised a middle eight

to to fit her “Matty Groves”.

 

I’ve got those ploughboys, soldiers, sailors

blacksmiths, highwaymen and jailors, fickle blues.

(take it to Cropredy bridge)

Well I rose up upon my feet

and buttoned up my jeans;

shouldered my guitar and headed

back to New Orleans;

but my lady’s brothers swore an oath,

with shotguns in their hands,

to hunt me like a rare white stag

from off their father’s lands.

 

I’ve got those anguished doom and tragic

call upon the force of faery magic blues.

 

Well, I woke up this morning

and knew I could not stay;

I was obliged to take a whaler

bound for Californ-i-ay.

I play blues shanties for the sailors

as they haul upon the ropes

while my love wears the green willow

for the dying of her hopes.

 

I’ve got those not-so-merry Maying,

in the greenwood I’m no longer straying blues.

oh yeah

I've got those finger in your ear
abandon hope all those who enter here blues.

Reviews
olla podrida
Written by patterjack (1196 comments posted) 3rd July 2008
stewed skewed and blue- d 
 
The mixture's fusion content is out of my basic knowledge area , particularly in music -- but the fun and skill inherent in this takes me back to my earlier days .  
 
I do not follow all the cross references completely -- as I said , out of my area -- but I can still appreciate with a big chuckle the way you have put this together . 
 
New area of poetic working for you ? But as usual done with elan ! panache ! and all those special words ! Veronican vivacity  
 
patterjack 
 
Wonderful fun!
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 3rd July 2008
Brian the PJ says it all - Veronican vivacity AND no small measure of intellect and skillful wordsmithery. 
 
Thoroughly enjoyed this! 
 
Oli :)
Ah!!
Written by fellpony (1617 comments posted) 3rd July 2008
I loved the "finger in your ear 
abandon hope all those who enter here" lines. Do folk singers intone with one finger pressed to their ear, any more? or have microphones done away with that classic pose? I think you covered a lot of bases (or basses!) here, perhaps only missing out "girl dresses as a boy to follow or trick her lover". Very wittily written and I could imagine this going well in a pub. Bwoz or Katanga should put it to music for you!
Excellent!
Written by Brett (785 comments posted) 3rd July 2008
Sorry, Sue, but (I hope Bwoz or Tolstoy will agree) as a blues enthusiast and musician I think that that the chord structure and riff are evident in the tongue in cheek delivery. 
I love the change from blues references to folk (since my baby left me.../...among the hedgerows green) and vica versa ( She sang...about a bold Dragoon / ...a twelve bar tune). And you couldn't leave the crossroads legend out, bless you! 
Must admit my favourite piece being: 
 
'I've got those ploughboys, soldiers, sailors 
blacksmiths, highwaymen and jailors, fickle blues.' 
 
Witty, well observed, marvellous. 
 
Cheers

Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 3rd July 2008
Really enjoyed this Vron - some of the 'choruses/refrains' were great and the shifts from blues lyrics to folk lyrics within each stanza are a clever touch.

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 3rd July 2008
This reminded me of the late great Adrian Henri with it's insistent rhythms and phrasing. A really clever and witty piece. I can't pick out anything specially I loved it all. I admired the way you changed between folk and blues and kept the narrative line all the way. 
My sort of poem without a doubt. All it needed was Andy Roberts to add a bit of guitar. 
cheers 
jane
Matty Groves!
Written by Katanga (1229 comments posted) 3rd July 2008
I wholeheartedly agree with all the positive reviews above! 
 
This is simply superb! 
 
Veronican vivacity indeed! (wonderfully apt, pj!) 
 
Matty Groves - are you thinking of the Sandy Denny with Fairport Convention version? Brings back great memories for me. " Who knows where the time goes?', 'A sailor's Life' etc etc 
 
I have a feeling that Joan Baez covered it as well, but I'm not entirely sure. 
 
Anyway, what a poem you've crafted here V. ! 
 
More please! 
 
Cheers! 
 
Homer

Written by Veronica_Milvus (637 comments posted) 3rd July 2008
pj, I had to look up olla podrida, yes it is a bit of a mishmash. 
 
Thanks Oli, it was your blues from yesterday that made me have a go at this. 
 
Sue, I've been going to folk gigs for more than ten years now and I've never seen anyone put their finger in their ear. But lots of Aran sweaters and weirdie beardies. 
 
Brett, being a blacksmith yourself may I recommend the Steeleye Span song of the same name, about a deceitful blacksmith who looks so clever with his hammer in his hand? 
 
Thanks Rob, will review your latest in a mo. 
 
BBS - being compared to Henri is a huge compliment, thank you! 
 
And John, yes, the Fairport version is the one I know and Who Knows Where the Time Goes is one of the best pieces of poetry ever. 
 
thanks all! 
 
Blacksmith?
Written by Brett (785 comments posted) 3rd July 2008
Not many have that skill these days - I'm probably a steel fabricator. Not as romantic, but just as bloody hard. 
And I'm familiar with the song - perhaps blacksmiths are deceitful (they use a forge) my steel is mild! 
Cheers

Written by Phil (6731 comments posted) 3rd July 2008
Enjoyed this, Veronica. An unusual but successful blend. Narrative too. 
 
Good stuff. 
 
Phil
Who knows?
Written by Katanga (1229 comments posted) 3rd July 2008
Ah, Veronica! Since you say above 'onre of the best pieces of poetry ever.', I hope you don't mind my reproducing it below for any folk who are not familiar? 
 
I am not trying to detract or distract from your own excellent poem! 
 
Reflecting, it's a kind of 'aubade' but so different and oh so powerful, though that doesn't do it any kind of justice - it's simply awesome for me and I could listen to it over and over again all night . . . 
 
So sad that Sandy Denny died falling down the stairs while pregnant apparently . . . 
 
This is the most highly recommended (by me!) song that I have ever heard . . . 
 
------------------------------------------------------------ 
 
Who knows where the time goes? 
 
Across the evening sky, all the birds are leaving 
But how can they know it's time for them to go? 
Before the winter fire, I will still be dreaming 
I have no thought of time 
 
For who knows where the time goes? 
Who knows where the time goes? 
 
Sad, deserted shore, your fickle friends are leaving 
Ah, but then you know it's time for them to go 
But I will still be here, I have no thought of leaving 
I do not count the time 
 
For who knows where the time goes? 
Who knows where the time goes? 
 
And I am not alone while my love is near me 
I know it will be so until it's time to go 
So come the storms of winter and then the birds in spring again 
I have no fear of time 
 
For who knows how my love grows? 
And who knows where the time goes?  
 
------------------------------------------------------------- 
 
I am shaken to the core, by this and yours ! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John X 
 
I mean . . .
Written by Katanga (1229 comments posted) 3rd July 2008
. . . why is that song just so spine-tinglingly good? 
 
If any analytically inspired poets out there could point a finger at why I find it so incredible, I would be eternally grateful! 
 
But, then again, perhaps it's better not to know, and simply trust one's spine?! 
 
Cheers again! Especially to you, Veronica - I hope I haven't hijacked this train of brilliant reviews by side-tracking? Not my intention at all! 
 
John X

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