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| Basic training -edit | |
| By Scrawl | ||||||||
| 03 July 2008 | ||||||||
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This is exactly what the title says it is, an edit of my earlier piece. Mia_ms_kim, thank you for the crit that led to this re-write as it made the next piece easier to start and made me think a bit more. Littledom, I think I have the formatting sorted on this one, thanks for pointing out that particular flaw on the earllier piece.
Once Martin returned us to the lounge and seated us to his satisfaction he left, almost simultaneously with the arrival of our tutors. And the regent. He made it clear that for the next month we would be learning to adjust to our new lifestyle, failure to do so was not an option. Julia signalled me to follow her and left, she led me downstairs into a large basement room. A woman a few years younger than me was there, she seemed unafraid.
I walked towards Marion, and to my surprise I could hear her heartbeat. She held her wrist out and I felt my fangs drop as I moved my mouth to her wrist. She winced slightly as my fangs slid through her skin and I tasted her blood almost instantly. I drank greedily, surprised that it tasted so unlike my first victim and didn’t hear Julia’s instruction to stop feeding. She pulled me from the wound by the throat and screamed at me to stop feeding and lick the wound. Marion was bleeding badly and screaming; I wrenched her wrist to my mouth and licked the wound. It sealed instantly and she collapsed. The floor – and my suit-was covered in blood. Julia told me, in colourful and concise language, that I would have to learn to keep my mind on what I was doing. Then she tended to Marion, calming her and guiding her from the room. I stood, covered in blood and wondered what would happen next. I realised that the smell of blood didn’t bother me at the moment. I obviously could control my hunger, just not very well. When Julia returned she brought me a change of clothes. I gladly changed.
We were assembled in the lounge again, ordered to sit and be quiet. Our tutors conferred for a short while then a man stepped forward and began to talk. He had a forgettable face and was dressed to impress. In my case he failed.
I mentally sighed with relief, his pompous voice matched his appearance and I found him hard to listen to. Sighing outwardly would’ve been risky, it’s not something we kindred do. He stepped back and one of the others stepped forward.
The second speaker was a woman, her emerald dress swished audibly as she came forward, like Julia she appeared to glide rather than walk. I noticed that her eyes were as green as her dress and that she looked to be only a few years my senior. The appearance was obviously deceptive; she was much older than she looked. When she started to speak she had a much deeper voice than I expected but at least it was pleasantly modulated.
She flowed back to be replaced by a tall, well dressed man with a face that should have belonged to a favourite uncle. Perhaps it did, once. His voice was deep, easy to listen to and carried as if he was used to lecturing or preaching.
He stepped back to join the others, they conferred briefly and then Julia told me to follow her and walked from the room. I say walked because I know she walked, I could hear her footsteps, but glided is a better description of what I saw. I hastily followed her as I realised that she was already out of the room and I hadn’t moved yet. I felt like a little boy running after his mummy. She led me to a room that turned out to be a comfortable parlour, she sat and indicated that I should do likewise, I did.
“I think the first speaker spoke at us rather than to us, like a bad preacher,” I replied, “and I swear he pronounced the capitals.”
“Don’t be facetious” she snapped, her hand gripping my throat. I hadn’t seen her move. “Now, let’s try again.” She was back in her seat, one eyebrow raised questioningly.
“I found the first speaker the hardest to listen to, the woman was easier and the final speaker reminded me of a lecturer, a skilled one he made me want to listen; there was rather a lot of information and I doubt if any of us will remember all of it.”
“Better. Now, why did you continue to feed when I told you to stop?”
“I didn’t hear you until you pulled me off, the taste, the experience, was overwhelming.”
“It is for most fledglings, and if they don’t get over it it’ll get them killed. Think if you had been feeding alone, outside.” She smiled, “And why did you have to run after me?”
“I was watching the way you moved, it fascinated me.” I blushed.
“Learn to use your senses, to control them. The big secret for survival is control.” She smiled, “Now for the next month you are going to be learning. A lot. Some will be knowledge, like the traditions, most will be skills like feeding, using your senses without letting them overwhelm you. I am going to ask you a question, you will answer it honestly. Do you understand?” “Yes ma’am.” I replied.
“May I ask why ma’am?”
“Yes ma’am.” I swallowed hard, it was the most elegant threat I’d ever heard.
“The ability is called psychometry and rarely survives the embrace, of course if it has you can learn to control it.” She smiled. “Take off your gloves and lift the candlestick from the table, tell me what you see. If anything.”
“This must remain our little secret for now.” She said, “You saw things that happened before you were born and your descriptions were accurate. Your gift has survived; it is one more thing you must learn to control. You will tell no one about this...experiment.”
“Of course not.” I replied, shuddering. “I would prefer to practice, if I must, on objects with a less bloody past.”
Julia laughed so hard that tears of blood ran down her face, I was still young enough not to know that she did that deliberately. For effect. “A vampire who doesn’t like blood.” She laughed, “Amazing.”
“And when were you going to tell me about that part of your life?”
I did as I was told. My domitor had been Victor Lowe of the Sixth generation from Caine of Clan Tremere. As I have already related her received a letter and left with those who delivered it. Afterwards I was found a job and was made aware that the Chantry was watching me and then I was told what my domitor had done. He had been feeding on kindred, kindred older than himself and they could prove it. After a while I was given a choice and that brought me to where I am now. Julia made me describe my time as a ghoul, in detail. I won’t bore you with it here. When I finished, I sat back in my chair and watched her closely. She sat upright in her chair and shook her head. I waited for the explosion that never came.
“Yes ma’am” I choked out, she released me.
“Sorry to intrude ma’am but I was told to find you and let you know that Felix has returned.” Said the girl, her voice pleasingly light. “He won’t talk to anyone else.”
“Good, now go to the library, find a book and start reading. When I want you I will call. I have work to do. Go.”
“Well done, sit down.” She said, I obeyed. “Now, what have you learned Michael?”
“Excellent. We will work on your other senses as well, the principles you have learned apply equally to all. Practice them.”
Over the next week we did just that, bright lights, loud noises, strong smells both pleasant and otherwise, I discovered an entire new world. I learned to be selective, to choose which sense or senses would be my main source of information. I learned why most kindred smell of some kind of perfume or cologne, the smell of blood could be a lot more than distracting for us. Half way through the second week of my training month came what I dreaded most. Training my ability.
I reported to the now familiar little parlour, and sitting on the table in front of Julia were a selection of items. I suppressed a groan, it was obvious what was going to happen, I took a seat and listened patiently as Julia explained what I was to do. I chose, for my first object a fountain pen still in its presentation box. I took off my right glove and touched the box. Nothing happened. I opened the box and admired the beautifully crafted pen then lifted it out. I saw someone writing, and not much else. Julia nodded and told me that the pen was less than a year old and belonged to one of the library scribes. Next was an ashtray. I touched it then threw it half way across the room; I saw fire and instinctively thrust it from me. My thrust propelled it across the room and into the wall with enough force to shatter it. Julia made me explain in detail what I had seen. I described the sudden flare of the flame and the heat, for the first time I realised that it wasn’t just visions. The next item was a knife, I looked at Julia who smiled and nodded. Reluctantly I lifted the knife. To my surprise I saw envelopes, lots of envelopes and a little blood as a clerk using it to open mail slit his finger. My vision was disturbed Julia’s laughter pealing round the room.
The last week of my month of training was a little different. I was sitting in the parlour with Julia discussing how we should proceed when the door burst open and a man a few years my younger burst into the room. He ignored me entirely and stepped between me and Julia, his back to me. “I apologise for interrupting, but I need to talk to you.” He said.
“No Felix he doesn’t know.”
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