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By Katanga
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06 July 2008 |
Where on earth did this ditty come from? I really don't know!
Alice?! (please forgive the nod at William Blake with his 'Songs of Innocence and of Experience')
It simply started with a single word - HOME.
For me, it's the most evocative word in the language - see Fleetwood Mac's 'Sara' " . . . and when you build your house, please call me home . . ." and Neil Young and Crazy Horse's 'Goin' Home'.
The above may not be to everyone's taste, but it does it for me and sparked the below . . .
Cheers!
Katie X
Home
The ghost of a poem calls me home
to where I spent my life
haunted by songs of innocence
experience and strife.
The ghost of a poem calls to me
beckoning in the wind
begging me to now atone
for all that I have sinned.
The ghost of a poem hunts me down
asks humbly for my pardon
which I cannot grant quite yet
as I tear flowers in the garden.
How should I forgive what’s gone
and what is yet to come?
I feel my life exhausted
by all that I’ve come from.
The ghost of a poem comforts me
puts me in my place
keeps my clothing on me
spiritual silk and lace.
I dress myself in silver
pink and grey brocade
I sit at home and ponder
what a life I've made.
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Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 6th July 2008 | The word 'home' has enormous resonance in music, because, of course, it relates to the home key, the home chord, cadence.
Thousands of popular songs play on this. (the Beatles did it all the time. Neil Young, yeah! 'Country Home', 'Goin' Back', 'Good to see you again', all spring to mind).
You've made me realise that the same can be achieved in poetry, but it would have been nice to see you end the 'perfect cadence' on 'home', maybe by returning to that first line? |
Written by Phil (7169 comments posted) 6th July 2008 | Home - there's a subject for the next Lazy Write, perhaps.
The last verse is just you.
'The ghost of a poem calls me home..'
Fantastic first line.
Phil |
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