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Our Generation
By chrismorton
06 July 2008
An old poem of mine. Bit of fun. Something different to my extended work chapters.

When they wake up in the morning
And stare through faded tears
They take turns in the bathroom
And count away the years

They are silent over breakfast
‘Cause it’s all been said before
They may chat over coffee
Let the TV chat some more

You know it’s all the same to him
And it’s all the same to her

And now the birds are singing
He sneaks a fag at bedtime
They grow their pleasure in the garden
She’s seen escaping with some wine

And her friends over the phone-line
And his life is on the stairs
Grow their pleasure in the garden
And count away the years

And the pictures on the wall
Remind him of the old times
And the entries in her diary
Remind her of his better lines

Reviews
Bitter-sweet
Written by Brett (1113 comments posted) 6th July 2008
but very enjoyable. I particularly like the final stanza - says it all. 
Enjoyed very much. 
Cheers

Written by Phil (7169 comments posted) 6th July 2008
Enjoyed this too. It read to me very much like song lyrics. Not a crit - just an observation. 
 
Phil

Written by KaydieKate (75 comments posted) 7th July 2008
I enjoyed this poem very much. It's very true and lyrical.  
 
The only thing I didn't like was the transition between: "...And it’s all the same to her" to "And now the birds are singing..." 
 
The whole thing flowed beautifully, until that stanza, which is kind of choppy. 
 
Overall, it's a wonderful poem. 
 
Kaydie

Written by Veronica_Milvus (794 comments posted) 7th July 2008
ah, how like the home life of our own dear Vron... 
 
nicely put.

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