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By NathanRoberts
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06 July 2008 |
The stye on my eye,
caused by stress, I guess,
began to weep
that week without sleep,
when you left without saying goodbye.
Now, all that remains is the eye.
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No Sleep!
Written by Katanga (1698 comments posted) 6th July 2008 | This very sad and touching.
I hope it's not true, Rob?
And did you intend the pun on 'eye'?
Now, all that remains is the 'I'.
All the best,
John
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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3713 comments posted) 6th July 2008 | Wonderful bit of hit and run poetry that leaves you with something to think about.
Very impressive
jane |
Written by Josie (2945 comments posted) 6th July 2008 | | Yes, you did well with this little poem, but the subject is, I agree, very sad. It's awful when people leave without saying goodbye. | Thanks all!
Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 7th July 2008 | Katanga: 'And did you intend the pun on 'eye'?
Now, all that remains is the 'I'.'
Yup, not a particularly subtle pun, but it works, I think.
'I hope it's not true, Rob?' I'm saddened to say it is true...I did have a stye! It's semi-autobiographical/autobiographical from mixed sources.
jane: 'Wonderful bit of hit and run poetry'. thanks, I wasn't sure if it was too slight to bother posting.
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